The Rainy Day Fund - Comments

God, my heart is in an aching knot after reading these new chapters. The effortless flow of one emotion to the next, the way you capture it is flawless. I simultaneously want to sob and scream with newfound life.

It's like breaking to be put back together again.

Again, such masterful description of such a casual, every day scene. One a great many of us have been in, have felt, and you capture it all to a T.

You, my friend, have true talent.

If I may, this freaking line: " If you respect it enough that it becomes pleasant, at the end of the day you're only human, so if you make a mistake or do something embarrassing, it doesn't matter. Life is wonderful when you really start to live it." just did me in. That entire chapter did me in, but I choked reading it.

If I wasn't invested before, I am now. This story is truly a work of emotional art.

This is so interesting! I love how you set up chapter three with the first two! We get a sense of his mind without even really meeting him yet. I love how we just pick up in a bar with him staring at some gorgeous stranger. And the last line in chapter three is really great. He was the sun and I found myself pulled into his orbit. Yep, just really like that a lot! I can't wait to see how they interact with each other. I can't wait to see the suit-guy's personality. :D

(one small thing though cause y'know me: it's = it is and its = possessive).

Your layout is simply stunning, first off.

I am loving this first chapter. The longing and searching contained within the character is such stark contrast to the familiarity if the description of the scene of the diner.

I feel so completely connected and invested in this already and I cannot wait to see where it will go.