Escape - Comments

I find that if you read your chapters over and over, your brain just kinda fills in the word that is supposed to be there... happens to me all the time. I can't wait to see how this continues :)

@ AngelicWasteland;
Thank you so much, I will go back and change that right away. Honestly I've read it so many times over that it's probably just slipped my notice. Hopefully will have chapter 1 finished by the end of the week.

Your description is good and the suspense was built at a good pace, plus the chapter left me with questions. Like, why he shot himself instead of her? What the deal was?

The only piece of criticism, well it's advice really, is make sure you read what you've written to make sure it makes sense.

It was literally just this sentence It surprise of it made Riley’s eyes fly open

I'm interested to see where this is going to go and hopefully get the answers to the questions I have.