The Injured Fawn - Comments

This. Was. Fucking. Amazing. Holy. Shit.

@ kiss my sas
I have no idea how I was not informed of this comment!

I am happy that you...got your fill?

It kind of left it as an open ending I guess...maybe I will have a short sequel at some stage?

Holy fucking shit!!!!
This was... god damn. I have no words!!!
Well, I have lots of words, but they are just a repetition of 'holy shit', 'fuck', 'oh my god' and 'Jesus Christ'.
I mean, this was just... whoa.

Lets just take a moment to appreciate the stark contrast of Richard and Till. Till is all about getting his, and being all rough and bitey, where as Richard is cute, and softer (lol, I didn't meant it in that way!!) until he gets her on his own.
Richard choking her? My god, I need a second to recover. So god damn hot! URGH!

To be a fly on the wall for the conversation afterwards!
Plus, she has nothing to be self conscious about. They are rock stars, I wouldn't be surprised if Flake just watches them all have sex :P Heheheh

@ PhenoBarbiDoll
...I’m already scared

@ ProverbofHell

Yes, but our cowrite is gonna be EPIC! So... Worthy of being ruined???

@ PhenoBarbiDoll
...yes, quite a few mentions were dropped, knowing you’d instantly pick up on them, especially the “du riechst so gut” part and the part about their age.

All in all I think it turned out better than I anticipated. I am happy that you’re liking your Christmas present, because you’ve ruined me without any chance of pulling myself out of this mess again!
Lotta love!

Yes. Give me ALL the vodka. Dude. It's getting intense. Okay. I'm commenting with my second reading of part 4. That's just how I had to do it.

Dear Lord. After sending you that picture of brooding Richard, that's all I can see... Just with the addition of Lyla on his lap. Daaaamn!

See, so, like... I think I would have finished just with the addition of Till's tongue. I can't even handle that image in my head. There are no words that aren't graphic. Lol.

.....................................

I just. I can't. Till and his damn German commentary and his fucking fingers and.

Welp. There it is. The part that killed me. I'm dead. Congratulations.

BOTH of them?! Owwwww. I mean...yum! But ow! That would take some getting used to. Seriously. How has her head not exploded? Fuuuuuuuuuuck.

Till does seem the biting type. I mean, I've imagined that since I watched the "Mein Teil" video. And Richard barking at him to be careful? Dude, she has your and your band mate's dicks inside her. A bitten nipple is the least of her concerns. Haha.

She just took a knock to the head! They had better be considerate! Her poor hurt skull and tired legs Till helping her up like a gentleman. Kinda hilarious, given the circumstances.

Had to get a shot in at their ages, huh? :P

Why can I so clearly see Till engaging in acts like this with other men?! I know there's a homo-erotic vibe around the band, but Till in particular just seems like NOTHING is off limits. And I can't decide if that's hot or kind of terrifying.

When he told her that she smelled good, all I could think of was the original bassist for Lynam saying that to my friend Heather and how much it freaked her out. To be fair, it was not said during a moment when it could have been considered sexy. She just had this sugar cookie lotion that he really liked.

Till is gonna rip her damn stitches out!!!!

Is it bad that I keep thinking how much the three of them are gonna need showers after this??? Hahaha.

Player 2 has left the game! Very nice of him not to leave and risk an unlocked door, but I still think having someone just...watching...would be so weird. Even if she did just get off with him.

Awe. Why is Richard so damn cute in this? Checking on her, licking her wounds, easing up so she can catch her breath. Makes me want to give him...a cookie. Yeah. We'll just go with that.

She has been beaten to hell and back. In a good way. Christ. I need a five hour nap just reading about it.

Till calls it fucking, Richard thinks of it as "lovemaking." Gee, I guess we know who the romantic in the band is.

She is getting bolder. It's not like she can do anything wrong at this point. She might as well go all in... They did

Hmm. Richard doing a little choking. I am not mad about this at all. He was kinda submissive to his front man, but I like his dominance. Mmmmm. Damn it.

He pulled out?!?!? At least someone in the room was able to form a coherent thought.

I mean... She still needs a shower, but okay. Richard didn't humiliate her by leaving it or telling her to clean herself up (like someone else we know...)

Yeah, like the whole band isn't gonna know she just got railed. Till wants to keep her on-call. I'd take that job.

Yes! She has somewhere to be! THE SHOWER!!!!!!

Or on his dick again. Either way.

Have I said thank you? Because THANK YOU! Jesus. This was not what I was expecting when you first mentioned writing me a one-shot, but ohhhhh my God. Now...to start Dr. Dick Productions

@ kiss my sas
It’ll never change, that’s for sure. Pheno may lead me into temptation from time to time, but my mind is strong on this one!

@ ProverbofHell
Hahahah, that is a totally fair call :P
I love your visceral reaction to Till. Forever entertaining :P

@ kiss my sas
I had planned on writing the rest of Part IV at work...but it’s totally NSFW and the thought of this sober has my ovaries well & truly shrivelling in pure horror!

@ ProverbofHell

Well, tis the season ;P
Cannot wait for the update! This is getting me through work :P

@ PhenoBarbiDoll

knowing him and his warped sense of sex & humiliation...anything is a possibility with him!

@ kiss my sas

Thank you!

This story has quite literally turned me into an alcoholic as I can simply not write anything smutty about Till unless there's red wine! Will need a booze break once Part IV is up tonight/ tomorrow!
And yes, I think Till is very well behaved for the situation they all find themselves in

@ ProverbofHell

He'd probably fight to include butt stuff

Just wrap me in a pretty bow and ship me to them!

@ PhenoBarbiDoll
You're killing me woman!!! How was I meant to read a massive comment like that at work, pretending not to laugh so my team doesn't realise I am not in fact working?
But yes...red wine seems to be the secret to writing Old Men Porn...who'd have thunk

I reckon Dr Dick would look down his nose at this and complain that it was way too timid. You know, just to not agree?

Last part shall be up tomorrow, on NYE.

P.S.: I may need to keep this travelling sex slave idea in my little memory box

Holy. Shit.

100000000% worth the wait!!!

I, like Pheno, am dead, and am also ecstatic that there is a 4th instalment!!! How exciting!!! :D

I just have no words for this chapter, just sitting here, drooling over Richard and Till. I mean, can Richard get any sweeter? Even in the moment, still thinking about his little Fawn and making sure she is okay with everything. Gah, I love him so much!!!
And I think Till is just excited to be included ;P

So I have read part 3 twice and I'm still trying to formulate coherent thoughts besides "Oh my God," "I'm dead," and the simplicity of Lol

Richard finally got to put his dick somewhere! I'm so happy! Hahahaha! Bless him, he had to content himself watching her suck Till, so he deserved to be the first one actually in there

Till and his damn observations in German. I would be sarcastic and say "Gee, thanks for the commentary," but really... Yes, sir! THANK YOU for the commentary

God. Now Richard is speaking in German, too?!?! WHY is that so hot??? German is NOT sexy!!!!!

I volunteer to make out with Till while riding Richard. I mean, clearly I'm the girl for the job, right?

How considerate of Richard to let Till get some. I mean, he found her, he intervened when she got injured, he was the one feeding her vodka and having his fingers sucked... He doesn't owe Till shit! But that possessiveness is so endearing, too. "This girl was his. He would allow his front man his release with her if she agreed, but he would be the one she finished with." And kudos to both men for making sure she gets hers.

Till's giving her a choice??? Well damn. I'd fuck him, too, just for that show of consideration

He could get used to this? Fine. Take her on the road as your sex slave.

Not gonna lie, "little fawn" is my new favorite pet name. *fans face*

Lyla literally might die. Two big, burly, muscular Germans handling her petite frame? Ohhhhhh man. But what a way to go.

Yeah, like we didn't know Till would vote for fucking them both. Seems his thing. Lol. I mean, I'm not mad.

They're acting like their birthdays have come early. It's so cute. And hot. And Till smacking her ass? Jesus. That's not a particular kink of mine, but I think Till could make just about anything a kink for me. Except butt business

I would be so self-conscious in that position, literally and figuratively speaking. Just having them standing there, looking me over? But Lyla is already so far gone, I don't imagine her embarrassment can overpower her arousal at this point.

I just died again. Fuuuuuuuck! Why is Till so good at this?! Never mind. Don't answer that. I don't want to think about his many years of sexcapades Haha.

Hello! Till licking Richard's fingers! That's it. I quit. I can't survive anymore.

Oh. Wait. Yes, I can.

Nope. Fingers and tongue and just the fact that it's the two of THEM? I'd probably get off just on principle



What's next?!?!?!!?!? I NEED WHATEVER IS NEXT, TOO!!!!!!

Let me just add that I really like the way this is written. Obviously I like the content, but this is just very well-written. Some smut is...you know...bad? Gratuitous? A little too much? But despite this being almost strictly smut, it's not like that. This is definitely one I would take to Dr. Dick Productions

@ PhenoBarbiDoll
I have plenty of soft spots, hence hitting the gym as much as I do! But Lindemann certainly ain’t one of them!

@ ProverbofHell

You're so mean. Till is weirdly appealing, and I can't believe you have to have alcohol to write about all that masculine sexy mountain of a man! Especially with that soft spot you're getting...

@ kiss my sas

Hahaha...I am not into slash at all but with all the Richard & Paul gifs Pheno puts up...there had to be AT LEAST a kiss! Rest assure: no more than that though.

Glad you’re liking it, sounds like I’ll have to bury two bodies once Pheno keeps over, too?

Finishing the last bit tonight after a night of rest. I simply cannot write about Till when sober *bbbrrrrr*