Flawless beauty.
October 16th, 2008 at 03:47am
Here's your review, hoe. :coffee:
It's going to suck though, 'cause y'know, Danielle is phail at leaving reviews.
Well, first off, I loved the opening lines. It reminded kinda of Chuck Palahniuk, dare I say? What I also liked how was friend never had a name, so it could be anyone. It let's the reader use their imagination, which is quite fabulous.
But I couldn't use mine, since I already knew it was you. :finger:
I keed, I keed. x)
One thing is that I don't think S in she should be capitalized, or the F in friend. But hey, that's just me, and I could be wrong. Do what you like, man.
And that, was my attempt at quoting Mr. Durden on his little rant about the things you own owning you, but I'm 90% sure I failed.
And boy never gets a name either, which is great. All mysterious and anonymous and wonderful. Even though I already know it's Frank. Or at least it was supposed to be Frank. Like, I could totally be snuggling with whoever the hell I want. (x
Or like, it could totally be a ryden. She = Brendon. He = Ryan. Friend = whoever.
:lmfao
Moving onnnnnnnnnnn.
"I'm fine." You could practically visualize a lie-detector flipping out as the two words poured from her lips.
That was probably my favorite line from the whole thing, I can't quite tell you why, because even I don't know. It reminded me of the Simpsons actually; Homer was hooked up to a lie detector and they asked him if he understood. He said yes, and it exploded. :lmfao
I know you don't care, but seriously, that was my favorite - or one of my favorites - from this.
The low "Ding-dong" of the doorbell was enough to give her a heart attack. She slowly stalked down the pink painted hallway of the apartment ahe shared towards the door.
It should be SHE not ahe. xD lolz.
But anyway, I loveloved this part for obvious reasons. Because this will totally be like our lives in a few years, after school and all of that shit, living in our shitty, pink apartment in Asbury Park. I indeed enjoy real life refrences. Bar you won't be a drunk, fuck up. Or at least you won't be a drunk fuck up by yourself. xD
And for some reason, he just wanted to hug her more. The way she was so seemingly unwanted, made him want her more.
This was indeed another part that I loved. It's just so flawless. And in case you were wondering, I'm hella proud that I've only used the word flawless once in my shitty review.
It was insanely hard to review this; to pick bits and pieces that I love and tell you why, because honestly, I loved the entire thing. The only issue I have with it is that I want moar. 'Cause I am an intense, selfish hoe. :file:
It's hard to explain why I loved each part too, but I tried.
Hopefully this will suffice, princess Arianna. :coffee:
Again.