99 Ways to Save a Life - Comments

I love the new chapter, Lonna. I think I wanna start writing for this again :arms:

I've just found this and I swear I'm in love.
The way each author made each character stand jump out of the computer screen and into my head.
Each character seems so real.
And the characters are real. They don't have random parts to their personalities; it's all there for a reason.
Another thing, the way the chapters blend together is amazing. Usually when there's multiple POVs, they seem disjointed but they just blend so well. It makes it seem so realistic.

Oh my <3333
I love this and I think that it's such a good project.
The writing is amazing and the stories are inspirational.
The details... o.o WOW.
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Love, love, love. ^^

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99 ways to Save A Live
Firstly, I've read the entire story before up to the latest chapter, and I have to say it is the most breathtakingly beautiful story I have ever read; I seriously think it could be published & bought!

My favorite chapter is the one about Sofia. She has so much confidence in herself, and while she may seem unkind on the outside, you can tell there is a hurting person inside. Many people would probably envy her for having good feelings towards herself. Although she doesn't say it, it's obvious how lonely she is, despite all of her little flings. She considers herself indestructible because she must've been through a lot that could've destroyed her, and the only person on her side must've been herself.

I also loved Leah's chapter. It was so deeply felt and heart-wrenching; how broken she was, and how none of it began with her at all. And the way you portrayed her brokenness was also lovely, and th descriptions, like this one;

My head risen back up from between my legs and for a second, my life shined on my face as if it was reflecting the sun.

Wonderful

Keep it up, and update soon, I want to read all 99 ^_^ -proud suscriber-

I loved the way you described everything in this chapter. Like everything... awesome.

The sun dove behind the hunter pines – liquid beams seeped their way through the cracks between branches. My eyes scanned the towering evergreens sketching their way throughout fading pink sky. Just lines like that were very nicely described, I loved the way that was done.

Hailey's whole concept intruiges me so much. I guess people who choose not to talk always do with me, but man I'm curious now. Especially after hearing the lines about her father. And the cliffhangerish ending, awesome. I really hope this is updated soon :)

I usually don't read group written stories, but this is really, really good. Every entry is beautiful, really. I can defintiely relate to Charlotte and Ciara. I'm already getting attached to all the characters, and I just started reading this about ten minutes ago. :XD And the way everything is described, I can really get a feel of what they're thinking. This is really intriguing.

But this is really, really good. I'm suscribing. :cute:

"Chapter Seven: Believe"

Tainted Seance,

the chapter was beautiful. I love how you compared Hailey to a train. You know, kind of like the little engine that could :tehe: Also, another thing I like is how well you described Camp Conquer. I tried alittle in my last chapter, but you made it dreamy. A safe place I pictured.

And going back to the beginning, was Hailey on the train that dropped her off at Camp? Was the lady, (I'm guessing was Erin) and Hailey in her office when they were talking?

I loved the emotion and we see a flashback of her father leaving. Very sad, it reminded me of myself and it hit home alittle. The ending was BEAUTIFUL.

This is a really cool idea

I loved Charlotte. :]

I really liked this new chapter. In some ways I can relate to Charlotte :)

That was a really neat way to start out the chapter, talking about birds having fingers. Something I really didn't expect. And then relating it to humans flying, really good.

I liked how everything was kind-of vauge, yet poetic at the same time. Like the part where she's at the bridge. And her denial I could really understand too, like her apprehension about group the next day.

Would they judge me the wrong way too? I loved that ending line.

Thank you.

We all work really hard on these.

I loved this new chapter. I really didn't expect Ciara to be the way she did right away when I started reading. But strangely I found myself really liking her. I feel sorry for her situation, but I do like her character.

Apparently, according to some doctor and a slip of paper, I have a mental illness. What does that mean exactly? I know I don't work the same to other people, but that's no reason to call me TROUBLED. I loved this line :)

Ciara and Erin's argument was done very well, I could really feel the emotion with the words. I was wondering all chapter what kind of illness Ciara had, and when I found out it made me feel even sorrier for her. Schizophrenia at that age... damn.

And I loved the closing paragraph too, it wrapped everything up nicely. Nice chapter, awesome story :)

haha awesome last two updates! I'm sorry I haven't been keeping up. I just started school and everything. I'm gonna go check out the forum next though. :D

Before I start, I wanted to say I loved it a LOT! But I’m sorry that I’m only reviewing the first two chapters., I’m not too good at reviews ):

The title is extremely catchy, by the way. I liked it a lot.

Anyways, I adored how you didn’t make it Leah’s fault; she grew up in the wrong environment. That's a first in a drug-related story, most of the time the teen does it on there own, for change. But for her, it's the same. She grew up with them.

And the Spanish was awesome, it gave the reader a look at her background without having to actually say it.

And you described he feelings so well, how broken she was.;

I covered my ears blocking her voice inside me head. I didn't want to hear her lies, screaming while the burning tears glided down my cheeks. After a couple of minutes the banging stopped. My head risen back up from between my legs and for a second, my life shined on my face as if it was reflecting the sun.

Your description is beautiful. And heartbreaking.

And then I read the next chapter, impulsively.

It answered a lot of questions unsaid in the first chapter, like why everyone left so suddenly, and how everyone usually lies to cover up their past. I could totally relate to that.

I just loved it over all. It showed how people with problems like that are also people, and have reasons. It shows how some lost everything, and others never had anything to begin with. It was wonderful and realistic, and I can’t wait until all 99 are finished (:

I just found this story, and I must say I'm impressed. I think so far the most interesting character for me was Sophia, because I can't really understand her thinking. But all in alll, I'm really liking this story. I'm sorry, I know this comment sucks but I'll leave a longer comment next time.

Wow. That was amazing. Intense. I loved it.

Ooh, I can't wait for my turn! :D

I love this story already. Subscribing, can't wait for more.

I came across a few mistakes in Lonna's, and I don't want to point all of them out. But what I lovelovelove is how you used Spanish, and made Leah repeat what her mother said in English, for the benefit of we non-Spanish-speaking people. :tehe: And it seemed natural too, not like in some stories when it's very obviously repeated for the benefit of readers.

I really, really like how Isa wrote in character. It made me smile, it was very good. All those apostrophes stood out on the computer screen, and I was like, 'woah' for a bit. :XD I thought Anansi was a girl at first. I was picturing Anchal from ANTM. :shifty

So, great work. The idea of this story is love. Update soon! :)

Review for Chapter One:

Okay - first thing I loved about the story is the fact that by reading the summary, you're intrigued and you want to know more. By giving a quote you show your own feelings about the story, and the description you give tells more about what the story may be based on rather giving away details about the story itself.
It made me curious to see what this was about and definitely made me want more of the story.

Once I started reading the story itself, I was sucked in - trying to figure out what exactly was going on.
The way you dredged the story up from Leah's memory? Perfect. It makes it more believable and the character itself seem even more fragile because you don't have her telling her story.
I also like her reaction to the circle. Rather than a classic teen angst "I'm only here because I have to be and I really hate all of you" thing, its made even better because she's trying.

One thing that could possibly use some...editing is your use of tense. When she's re-living the scene you switch from past tense to present tense a lot. It gets a little confusing so you may want to watch out for that.

Other than that - its fantastic. I love it.
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This is really a good story so far. I like how the author started it out with Leah, with the memories and such. And the way the author wrote it with Anansi was great.

Though, I pictured Anansi as a girl halfway through the chapter. :XD

Anyways, it's really good. And by chance, is it 99 different authors, or does every author get x amount of chapters? Just wondering, cause I'd like to contribute to this project.

More soon?

Wow, so far amazing. I love the mood that is being set

I can't wait to read the other 97 things. :tehe:

Okay so, one of the things that I like about this story is that by reading the title, you already know that it's an interesting read.
So was reading the the summary. It could interest the reader on his/her first look into the story.

"No! I'm not going," I scream through the thickness of my bedroom door... I just wanted to point out that maybe there's a missing coma there? :shifty

I love how you presented the scare in your character's memory. The way she's fragile is so believable. My head raises back up from between my legs and for a second, my life shines on my face as if it's reflecting the sun. I've always said it before my other reviews, but I love the way you describe. :yah

I stopped eating my mother's cooking a long time ago. I think the 'stop' should be in past tense, since she was talking about 'a long time ago' yes? :shifty

When you used Spanish, I was ecstatic. :XD I love it when authors do that! And when you used it in the story, it was like telling something about your character without completely saying.

I love how everybody just left without another word. :lmfao Typical. :tehe: It makes your story seem more realistic. And the way you ended it... :grr:
I wanna learn more about this Anansi character. :think:

This is a good start. :cute:
Maybe I'll see more soon? ~~