Picture Perfect - Comments

I like this story!! UPDATE??!!

I like it. Very nice.

sweet story
hope to see more ^.^

Lol. Thank you. I'm never any good at writing first chapters. I appreciate your comment, and your suggestions. Thank you, I'll keep those in mind.

Overall, this was a pretty good story, I really liked it!
The bits where you compared her father to Amy Winehouse and the "who doesn't like bubbles?" parts made me laugh, those were quite good.
My only suggestions would be that some parts were a little slow, like the part describing in great detail her makeup routine and a bit of the dialogue with her father was on the slow side, so I'd suggest having maybe faster dialogue there and although some are good, not too many details that aren't absolutely essential to keep the story moving.
I think this story has a lot of potential, though, the summary intrigued me. So I'm interested to read the next chapters and see how it moves along :]
Keep writing!! All in all, nice work.