Linger - Comments

I liked it. I'm totally excited to read what happens next.

I love the name Jayden by the way, I used it for one of my stories and I think it's just adorable!

I'm so happy you updated :)
Ooooh. Jimmy knows something.
It's obvious :)
Amazing update.
Can't wait for more :D
Soon, yeah?

oohh things are getting good!

love the update :D

Seriously, you need to update.
And fast.
I can tell this is going to be an amazng story.
And I reaallyyy wanna' read
:D
So Update soon, yeah?

Linger:
Firstly, your writing style is very good, while I think it's currently on it's way developing[description and metaphor-wise].
The prolouge was very short but sufficient and it really was intriguing in it's own way. I loved your metaphors like 'the sky littered with stars' and how you described the movements and action.
The first chapter was ... kind of a turning point for me regarding your style and I realized I was kind of under-estemating you [and I'm sorry]. Your description is superb and has this crisp fresh feeling to it.

And to be honest, I don't read Aveneged Sevenfold fanfiction much so if I might seem... reluctant about some things forgive me.

But frankly I'm not sure if I can give much feedback because this is just the start of your story and I'm not quite sure how the prologue and the chapter following it relate to each other but I'm sure you'll get over to that as you post more chapters and explain the deal and how they cross ways.

And I think this is just the introduction to your to main characters so I can't really judge and get too indepth to interpret your charactes and how you portray them.
This is a crappy review so I'm sorry, love but keep it up. I'm sure I'd love to read the rest of it <3

This story sounds so amazing so far. I absolutely love how you described everything.

I liked how the first chapter was short and hard-hitting, then the second contrasts completely which is good because they feature different characters. You're great at descriptions!

Favourite line: It felt completely void of existence, as though the heart and soul of the room was missing. Just...wow.

I'm really intrigued as to what's going to happen now, and I look forward to it :]

:cheese: so great. It has a pull to it that makes me want to know what's going to happen next.
More please?

Whooaa :)
This is looking to be a pretty nifty story :)
*Subscribes*
More soon, yeah? :)

I love it so much hun!!!
Anxiously waiting for the next chapter.

Omg Im totally subscribing!

I can't wait to read more of this! subscribing!
I think it's going to be amazing.

I like this!

subscribing!

Can't wait for more.

Looking good. Can't wait for more.

Sounds great so far, love!!
And I'm a very picky reader so that's saying something!
Update soon?