June 21st, 2009 at 10:11pm
I remember this story... wasn't it on coming clean?
it's good; liked it them and still like it now
Yes, I Fall - Comments
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March 13th, 2007 at 06:02am
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Thank you, thank you, thank you.
I was sort of thinking about trying to write it like some cop show, but I don't really watch those, so it'd be a gamble how it turns out.
I might try anyway, though. And I guess I have a problem making characters clear. ><
Thanks for pointing that out.March 1st, 2007 at 12:37am -
I hope that what I'm about to say will be of some importance, or I'll be in trouble for posting here
Okay, the idea is great, especially the way you ended it. But I think it needs more description - more main character's thoughts. I'd like to know more about the things going through his head, more about the motives.
All in all it's a rather interesting oneshot, but with more descriptions of his state of mind it'd be a much better one.
~ Helena
P.S. I love the layout!!February 26th, 2007 at 09:31pm -
Oh shit. If only is this wasn't a one shot... Good job.=]January 3rd, 2007 at 12:11am
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this is really good. i'd like to see where this would go...
srry not very good with critizem <-- if i even spelled that rightDecember 28th, 2006 at 01:46am
Whether it be "fun" or "hard" before hard time figuring this one out.