OMG i likes alot pweez pm me if u update thanks
April 16th, 2008 at 01:09pm
I really like this. The title is great. I could really imagine those things in my head.
Was it because of his killer smile, his good looks, or the way his green eyes shone in the dim light? Instantly, I knew I was torn between the two men, and that I loved the young man I had considered a brother for so many years and the drummer boy I had acquired a crush on over the years.
That was my favorite part.
But I think you need to add a little more description on what the main character is thinking about things.
...trying to cover up my body as best as I good. You need to correct that. I also catched a few typos, so I suggest you re-read it and correct them.
Otherwise, I liked the story and it was very well written.
