Nice and Blue. - Comments

I see, it's perfect the way it is. But. I don't think you can ruin it (: It's not your style (:

LOL indeed. xD
I was thinking of it for a while, but there's really nothing more to it.
Don't wanna ruin it now. :]

Bastard Son.:

Oh, no. xD This is a one shot. xDD But I'm thinking of another one at the moment.

And thank you. You know, I'd love to read something of yours in Croatian.

I noticed that you had put a full stop at the end of the last sentence (: I know it was one shot but for some reason I thought, I hoped that an amazing writer as yourself would surprise us all with a whole new scenario (:

I was wrong LOL

Oh, no. xD This is a one shot. xDD But I'm thinking of another one at the moment.

And thank you. You know, I'd love to read something of yours in Croatian.

I forgot to tell you something (:
Your writing style is just like mine but in Croatian (:
And I've been told it's very interesting, I've been told that I know how to draw people in, to make them keep reading. So, it applies to you, to your writing style, to your stories. And, I absolutely like the descriptions!

And, one more thing, UPDATE IT!!!!!111111111111 *tired of waiting* LOL

Thank you. <33

O.M.G. OMG all the way. I didn't know what to expect when I clicked on your story. Really, I didn't. But then I started reading and was all: My God, this writing style, these forms, these sentences, epithets and thrill... Absolutely wonderful. I'm still amazed. Shocked. Positively shocked (:

Aargh, thanks. I'm glad you liked it and I'll have to thank Tas for the recommendation.

That was awesome...Were do I begin? Well my girlfriend Tas encouraged me to read Nice and Blue. She told me that she really loved it so I gave it a shot. This piece of work right here is something different. The way you use your words is so beautiful. You are providing an image to your reader with your words. The syntax provided a nice flow to your story. As for the plot, you could write a whole book with that if you wanted to. The plot has a lot of depth, too. I am truly impressed.

Tas, this made me smile so much. Coming from you, this really means a lot. And I really fucking love you too.

Wow, Sara. I seriously am at a loss for words. Your writing is so amazing. I LOVED the idea. The concept.I'm kinda glad you didn't enter the contest 'cause you would've blown me out of the fucking water. Er... You are my inspiration. I want to be able to write like you. Sometimes your descriptions really make me feel like I'm looking at the entire senario play perfectly in my head. No spelling or grammar mistakes, that I noticed. What I find truly amazing is that English isn't even your first language (if I'm correct) and you write better than a lot of people who learned English first and/or only know English. I find that absolutely mind-blowing. Gah. How do you do it? Your words are perfect. I loved this. His mind was like a blender. So confusing and a beautiful twist in the end. Loved it. It was an orgasm on the eyes. I swear, I fucking love you.

Guys, thank you so much!

And Helena, wow. I love to see a good review and this one was one of the best, if not the best, I have ever gotten. I didn't notice any mistakes, you twerp! -hugs- I'm really flattered.

umm i compare to the comment above me, but it was amazing. absolutely loved it ;]]

"It was like an opiate – the thought of death creeping up on him through the worn down hallways of his delusional mind where every footstep echoed louder than an explosion of a canon ball."

The beginning itself entrapped me. I was stunned. I knew you could write a good story, but you've outdone yourself by writing this one. I read that sentence a couple of times and every time it leaves a stronger impression on me. It's the perfect beginning for a story like this one.
Then the concept - his conscience haunting him. I love it how you made the fear he incited in the minds of all those boys, his prey, come after the hunter himself.

"Forever trapped in his worst nightmare, forever afraid, forever stuck down there, where they were all so very nice and blue, where his lips quivered and tears trickled in streams."

I always liked the metaphores and comparisons you used. That sentence also left me speechless. It's pictoresque and doesn't seem special, but it sends shivers down my spine every time I read it. Scary. But powerful.
You managed to stay objective throughout the whole story. (Svaka &#269;ast!)You didn't blame Shirley for his actions but let the reader to decide whether Shirley was worth his compassion.
I do feel sorry for him even though he tortured innocent boys. Maybe it's beacuse of his father's character (he kinda seems like a know-it-all) whose saying is what this story could be summarized to. But then it'd lose all the qualities it possesses - an enthralling storyline, a 'strong' character, and the depicted emotion that feels raw at times.

This whole rant could be reduced to one word - powerful.



P.S. This is the third review I wrote. I lost the previous two because my internet connection hates me tonight. And the first one was the best review I've ever written. Now, I'm on the verge of a nervous breakdown so I apologize for mistakes of any type. I tried to write a review this story deserves, but thanks to my luck this will have to suffice. Sorry.
I really liked it. I think what speaks the most is that I printed it out and attached it to my diary :}

It was kinda hard to follow,but what I got or seemed to get was AWESOME!!!!