We Cannot Really Love If We Cannot Laugh - Comments

Ch. 15, 18, 19 and some others had some pronoun confusion. Since the writing was in first person point of view, which you wrote somewhat decently, it should not have "you" thrown in randomly- I'm not sure how old you are, but if you're over 14, you should be able to write "I'' consistently. I'll be going onto the sequel now- the French translations were accurate from what I could see.

Please put up the sequel!!!!! i'm dying to know what happens next :shock:

There's a sequel if anyone's interested

I like the ending. :]

that is seriously the best fred story i've read in awhile! I love it!

Aw, they're getting married!

good update. :]

ooh, i like it. :]

I liked it *suscribes* can't wait for the next. ^_^