His Wicked Smile - Comments

Awesome new update!
I love it.
It sucks that mibba did that to you. It happened to me too...=P

AWESOME!
udpate.
dont give up on it, I wont be surprised that you would get ten stars.

great update :D

I only got through a little before I had to quit. Here's why:

1. You changed tense in the first line twice. From past tense to present tense

2. You can't find out you are pregnant a day after you have unprotected sex. You can't even BE pregnant a day after. You can be on your way there, but conception alone takes a good 72 hours. Then you can't test positive on a home test until you have missed a period, because enough of the pregnancy hormones have to be present to show up on the test. Some home tests can detect pregnancy like a day or so after a missed period. But none can detect it before that.

3. "What if he is some 30 year old man?!" lmao Oh wow, that is so silly. Like 30 is just so disgusting. Look at Gerard Way. He's over 30 and hot as all get-out. That comment was just so juvenile. I doubt that is what a rape victim would be worrying about. Whether or not her rapist was 30. :roll:

LOVED THE UPDATE :]
I love this story!
Can't wait to see what happens.

ahah loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

aww i really like this story!!!!
update soon again!!

:] I likey it ...cannot wait fors more

-subs-

wow...this story has barely any comments. 0.0. it should have more! welp anyway, just wanted to say i love this story, more soon??? :D

Great update,
again.

=]

I like it...

Man your making me look bad since I don't update as often unless I'm forced

I probably don't count much for an inspiration if I can just bug you to death
so same here good chapter
luv you bell
=P

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If your going through hell keep going

I loved this update :)
I'm going to tell more people about it,
deserves more readers!

your such a dufus but your my dufus thanks for updating i did too

I love this story soo much!
It's crazy good,
keep up the great updates!