Heart of Crime - Comments

I agree with the commenter above.
I feel like this is a bit all over the place.
But maybe it all ties together in the end?

Good story, but it seems like the setting jumps around a lot, try to make sure it's clear to readers.

BUMP

Great job, very original and well-written.

I finally updated
Sorry it took so damn long

Thanks :)

This story leaves me with a lot of questions (which is a good thing) about what's going to happen next. I love how your wrting style is...very descriptive but not over the top...I wonder if Mr. Drug Dealer is going to get caught? Can't wait for chapter 2.

seems interesting. I'd read the next chapter...*subscribes*

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