The Federation - Comments

Yikes! Is Brisingr out?! YAY!!! Better go buy it...

Lovely update m'dear! Great introduction to Melanie. Watch her though, she's got the beginnings of a cliched heroine, you never know where they'll dart too. :mrgreen:

Lawl. your update is the same day as the new Eragon book. :D:D
Anyway. Mel and Dan are interesting characters. I like them. they have a pretty good dymanic going, and I can't wait to see more of it! Keep it coming!

I really like this so far. It's very good. I'm looking forwatd to the next chapter.

:mrgreen: I love new chapters. I just... ooo, I just love them.

So... the plot thickens... can't wait to meet Melanie. I'm assuming that's what you mean by the main plot picking up next chapter. YAY!!!

Yay! Chapter update! And, *urrrgh* A whole week? Well, if I have to wait that long, I will! This sotory is really amazing! Your grammer is very good - much better than most of the stiroes on this site. *shudders* And I can't wait for more of the plot to come! I'm very happy! *squee*

Yay! Chapter update! And, *urrrgh* A whole week? Well, if I have to wait that long, I will! This sotory is really amazing! Your grammer is very good - much better than most of the stiroes on this site. *shudders* And I can't wait for more of the plot to come! I'm very happy! *squee*

I think I've finally found it. The original story. You don't know how long I've been searching, how many painful hours of trawling through endless fanfics, arranged marriages, vampire romances, and badly written dream inspired stories... And I never found it, because it hadn't been written yet!!!!

Congratulations! I love it. And I'm not just saying that, I mean it. :mrgreen:

Please write more before Saturday. A week-long gap is most certainly not reasonable when you've just got me so completely obsessed.

This is definately cool! I'll be watching for more of this one.