Can't Be Saved. - Comments

Poor Gerard, their mother should have taken them with her. Why did she leave them?
I just hope everything gets better for the two brothers and maybe Frankie will give them a bit of happiness ^_____^
An awesome chapter. Hope to read more soon <3

Very nice chapter, and I like how mature Gerard is, even though he's only seven years old.
His dad should choke on his own vomit. ::Ranting:

Me likey. And Frank is adorable!

PS. pleaseee subscribe to my story, as I have done for yours. :file:

I love you.
You're the only person so far who's said that they understand why the mom left.

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I come to comment, armed with Maltesers.

This story has fantastic potential, because yes its a waycest, but its not the conventional one where both brothers are horny, or one is abusing the other into a relationship. I like how you start the story off from the beginning and show their relationship, so we can feel their love blossom as the story goes on. How their innocence is broken, their need is revealed and their love established. It would be beautiful if someone actually wrote it detailed and well as I'm quite sick of fast paced waycests. The nature of the story is too delicate to be taken and made to lose meaning, there is so much an author can achieve if they just put their heart into the story and really get down what their characters are feeling. I sure hope you continue to put all your effort into it, I believe in you. :]

I can understand why their mother left without taking them. Its actually a quite thought out plan in my view. She knows that their father only abuses her, or that's what I've seen so far, and therefore if she goes she believes that the violence will stop and Gerard and Mikey can live a better life. As much as a mother never wants to let her children go, she does what she thinks is best for them, hence what she does is not necessarily the right decision, but what she perceives it to be; she has nowhere to go and if she ends up on the street she doesn't want her kids to suffer and die prematurely - the reason I'm thinking why she left them with their father so at least they have shelter and food and a chance at life.

The way you bring in the whole family into the story makes me very excited for a homey feel to the story. It really sets the brother's dysfunctionality in perspective as they weren't bought up in a normal, stable, loving home, thus turn to each other for love. I'm not sure right now whether you will make their relationship something sexual or just love - I can't wait to see what you do surprise us with.

Only suggestion I would say is to keep the theme of innocence running, it adds a nice touch to it all, its what I gather the story is based on and so many authors fall into the pit; they describe the timeline of a story, making it a boring account rather than a story. A real story is where you don't have them go through time, but move through life! I know that sounds weird, but I see a difference between time and life that I find hard to explain, so don't wory if you don't really get what I'm talking about. By the end of a story the character(s) should have moved through a part of their life and what they learn in their lesson is what makes a story. Its not the ending that matter, its the means to get there. I don't wanna read a story only to find out how hard a character's life was and how in the end they fell in love, I want to see what they learned about themselves, what love means to them and how its changed their perspective or personality. I probably made no sense and ruined the whole comment. Sorry.

Update soon when you can. :arms:

Awrrr -hugs kitten-
Mikey is soo cute!
Great update =]

WHY DIDN'T SHE TAKE THEM WITH HER?! WHYYYYY?!
Haha, great chapter. I loved the cutsie bits.

No, not right. She shouldn't have left the kids with him.

Can't wait to see what Frankie's like.

More soon?

loved it! update soon?

Yay! Mikey made a friend [:
And you put in The Nightmare Before Christmas; one of my favorite movies!
I luffed the update and I can't wait for the next one... So update soon!

--loony lyssie

Poor Gerard...
I wonder if he's gonna feel bad because Mikey made a friend.
More soon? <3

Ahh! I hope whatever spawn i ever produce is that responsible!
xD
They're adorable and I' picturing this little baby frankie all punk'd out and awesome..

Awwww. That's sad. I would've taken the kids with me.

5 STARS. :cheese:

*MAJOR SPAZ*

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Wow..

But why didn't she take them with her? She's left them with a horrible abusive father!!

Can't wait for more, it's awesome.

-tears- Chapter 2 is so heartbreaking! How could any woman that calls herself a mother abandon her children with a monster? I can see how she would want to escape but if her boys really meant anything to her, she would have taken them.
This is an absolutly incredible story. That issue isn't taken lightly and you wrote it beautifully. Even when you want to smack some sense into their mom, you also feel incredibally sorry for her. Just amazing.
I can not wait to read more and see what happens. Keep writing your beautifully talented work. =)

Your writing is ah-mazing.<3

It's really sad. But I really love this story.

*sadface* she left them? that's so sad. well, I really like it so update soon!

Oh no she di'nt just do that!

Wait, yes she did, bad mommy.

Yet amazing story, more soon (:

omg! so she just left him with that sorry excuse for a dad?
bad mom award....
more soon plz?

more more more more more more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! please! this is one of the best stories i`ve ever read, pwease? update soon? pwease? with cherries ontop?