I need a few people to review this for me . . . - Comments

Aliss, this is so fucking beautiful. I could never write anything as wonderful as that as long as I live.

thank you for that x

I must say this is pretty much incredible for a 12-year-old. Your choice of words is perfect and contributes to reader's feel for the story. You're really eloquent. You're also very good at expressing feelings, hopes, expectations, etc. using words.
All in all, I liked it a lot. You're talented

I love it!! It's great... so much meaning. I don't think I could write something like that. It's perfect. You are incredible for 12. That's great. WOOT!!

Pwease . . .