Want Your Story Critiqued? - Comments

It would really be nice if you would critique my first story on here and send me the critique as a message rather than comment on the page. I'd really like to improve, as a writer: http://www.mibba.com/Stories/Read/516096/Caraphernelia-Carmen-Reyes-Diary/

Ack, I have so many stories I want some serious feedback on. Like real-deal advice on how I can improve. Here are just a few but you can pick whichever you want:

Frailty
Teach Me
Gamophobia
Hush
Hook-up

If you could just pick one or two it would really mean a lot. They're all one-shots if that matters or anything. Thank you so much for doing this because it's so hard to find someone to really critique my work seriously (not that the ass-kissing is particularly offensive or anything )... Then again, maybe I'm not looking in the right places...

Could you critique these drabbles?
Beach
Mermaid
Blood
It would be great if you could. Thanks in advance.

I was wondering would you be able to check out my story
Curiosity. It's a One Direction fic, but it's one of my favourite that I have written so far. It's a different style for me could you please check it out for me I handle constructive criticism well so please be as constructive as you like I don't mind

I'd love to have my stories critiqued too One-shots get so little attention here more so if it's original fiction.

Could you critique my story Ave Maria? If it's possible, critiquing on my other story Atonement, which is the continuation of Ave Maria, would be nice

I'd love to have my stories critiqued but I have like no substantial stories up. This is a great idea, though! You're awesome.

Ohh!! Could you critique my Mademoiselle Noir?? Its a fanfiction crossover but I wrote it intending it to be enjoyable for any reader... maybe I can get a critique on that element?

I would love some constructive criticism on my story Lifeline or at least in one or two chapters of it. Thank you beforehand!

If you could check out my story Dégoûtante or Looper, I would be very grateful. c:

If you crtiqued My story JudgementDay that would be amazing.

This is awesome. I'd love love love it if you'd critique my one shot Like the Ticking of the Clock. :) Link