Commitment Issues. (Support Group)

landslide;:

For Innocence, I think you should go into what it is that he and his "father" are trying to do. You have it set and ready, now you just need to unconfuse us a little bit. Not too much though. That should lead you into the plot itself and get you set for the rest of the story.

For Closure, I think you should start the next chapter with them getting to the apartment. I think she should thnk she sees him again, or she should have a nightmare. You could take this to the dramatic "he raped me and got me pregnant" or you could have him come back. Or if you want to get it over with, you could have them get a wonderful phone call of "we think we caught him, can you identify him please" and then all is well because he's behind bars getting a broom shoved up his butt because that's what happens to rapists in prison. Do any of these help you? If not, I can come up with more. =)

Thank you! I feel like updating Innocence today! n.n The support is great. x]

Lula:

I have a feeling this thread is going to be well used. I have one story that I started in middle school that ended up with between 20 and 30 chapters (can't remember the exact number) but it had no plot or ending whatsoever. I rewwrote some of it and now it's almost 20 chapters with still no end in sight. It sat in my stories for so long before I updated it again a couple days ago.

I gave one of my stories a crappy and cliche ending just so I could say it was done. I've been thinking about rewriting the ending or just adding a few chapters to it but I can't think of any new ideas for the life of me. *fail*

You've come to the right place then! Give a link to one or both of those and I'll take a look, see if I can help you rewrite or tell you if you don't need to, it's just fine the way it is.

wild swan.:

I have this story that I worked my butt off on for the first chapter called, The Truth about the World and now I'm completely stuck on the second chapter! I know where I want the story to go but I'm just at an encompass.

So, you're stuck on how to start 2? What about meeting the babysitter? An encounter with Gracelynn? Or you could have him roam a little looking for something to do or maybe an ice cream shop only to find...[fill in the blank].

landslide;:

You've come to the right place then! Give a link to one or both of those and I'll take a look, see if I can help you rewrite or tell you if you don't need to, it's just fine the way it is.

Ah well, if you insist. The first link is too the story with the crappy ending. I had a really great idea when I started it and then it kind of disappeared with writers block. I was left with nothing. The second link is to the story with almost 20 chapters (again) and no ending in sight. Well, actually, it does have an ending now it's just a matter of leading up to it properly without having a bazillion more chapters added.

Forgotten -> Crappy ending story.

Heaven Help Us -> Story that may end up going on forever if I don't get my brain working right.

I don't seem to be having much luck with either of them, I really want to the last chapter rewritten for the one story. Even if it's not much better, anything to get rid of the clicheness.

silk tea.:

OH dear god, this is my haven. Out of all of my chaptered stories, I've only finished one. And personally, it was a terrible ending. IT should've gone a lot longer.

I can help you lengthen it. Give me the story link and I'll read it through. =)

landslide;:

So, you're stuck on how to start 2? What about meeting the babysitter? An encounter with Gracelynn? Or you could have him roam a little looking for something to do or maybe an ice cream shop only to find...[fill in the blank].

Thank you so much! I think he's going to roam around the town, maybe hit the ice cream parlor.

wild swan.:

Thank you so much! I think he's going to roam around the town, maybe hit the ice cream parlor.

Glad to have helped. =)

I've been stalking this thread and now I need to use it xD

I kinda sorta know what I want to MAYBE happen in chapter 8 of The Last Fight but I have absolutely no idea how to start it. If someone could maybe read chapter 7 at least and give me some ideas, that would be fantastic and I shall of course credit you

landslide;:

I can help you lengthen it. Give me the story link and I'll read it through. =)

You're my god right now. Chemistry

Icamane Potter:

I've been stalking this thread and now I need to use it xD

I kinda sorta know what I want to MAYBE happen in chapter 8 of The Last Fight but I have absolutely no idea how to start it. If someone could maybe read chapter 7 at least and give me some ideas, that would be fantastic and I shall of course credit you

I could see Harry coming in the shop or to her house to ask her some other ridiculous question, something involving her whereabouts the night before and because of it, it proves Lance's intentions.Or you could take the more passive route and have very little happen in the chapter.
Either way, I think it should begin with Jen contemplating the night before, and a little of what Harry had been saying. I think she should be at her flat, in the middle of the night if you have something dramatic happen or the next day if the chapter is more passive. I also think that, whether big or small, something should happen that makes Jen truly consider Lance's proposition.

Help much?

silk tea.:

You're my god right now. Chemistry

I actually think the length is perfect. And the ending is not terrible. The chapters between the first and last were short, but it just fit. This story is something to be proud of, short or otherwise. I think you should write a very brief epilogue, though, as you said you might in your author's note. I think it should involve Tracy coming to school, walking up to Leslie, and pull out a pair of contact lenses. They should share a connivingly amused smile, and then BAM! it's over. Or something similar. Something that just makes the reader say "Yes!" and that's just about all you need. =)

Well, I did write an epilogue, it's attached to the story and that one has a sequel. It states what happened between Leslie and Tracy when school started back up.

^ I still feel like it needs to be wrapped up a little more somehow. an event between your last chapter and the first chapter of its sequel.

Yeah, but it has an epilogue. It's called Summer Love?

So, my most popular story started out as the one that I loved the most. But now it's twenty some chapters long, and I don't love it the way I used to. I feel like I'm not writing it for me anymore and that the quality of it decreased the longer it went on. I really want to rewrite it, but I'm not sure how to go about it. Help?

landslide;:

Thank you :D I think I might have some more ideas

Nonsensical.:

So, my most popular story started out as the one that I loved the most. But now it's twenty some chapters long, and I don't love it the way I used to. I feel like I'm not writing it for me anymore and that the quality of it decreased the longer it went on. I really want to rewrite it, but I'm not sure how to go about it. Help?

Give us a link?

I don't really have commitment issues (just writing slowly issues) but I do know a few tricks that can help some of ya'll out.

1. Think of a motive to write. If you don't have any reason to write a story, it'll be harder for the story to get done. My motives were that maybe one day I can make money for the story to pay for college.

2. Give yourself less time to write. I realized that the less time I had to write, the more I wrote. This is because I'll have other things less interesting or things going on that exercise the mind making me get more ideas to linger in my head.

3. Let someone outside of mibba read you story. Before I read my story Extranormal to my sister, I didn't really touch it a lot. But when I started reading it to her, it almost felt like I was obligated to update the story for me to read to her. Quite honestly, I could give a damn about what the mibba people think about my updates, but my sister will constantly bug me and it isn't something I could just ignore like a petty story comment telling me to update soon. Now I haven't been reading my story Dream Life to her so now I'm not really working on it much.

4. Find out what helps you get ideas. I realized that for whatever strange reason, after a good day of getting hot and sweaty with exercise, I get story ideas. Find out what makes you write. I've heard of another person who has to shower to get inspired to write.

5. Last, and probably one of the most important DO SOMETHING! When I sat around the house all day doing no more than breathing and letting my heart beat, I never got inspired. It's extremely difficult to get inspired by things going on in your house because you're too used to the things going on (unless you live in an unstable household or something of that nature.) My job that I'm currently working has inspired me to start a short story that I know won't be too hard to finish.

i'm trying to write chapter two of bears & bridges, but i don't know what to write. i feel like it should be connected to chapter one. like it's still an introduction.

Blackjack.:

Give us a link?

The Only Exception

Nonsensical.:

The Only Exception

Okay, so I've just finished reading it. And I loved it. Proof: I have literally stayed up all night to read it. It is now ten past five in the morning and I can see the sun rising. it looks like it will be a lovely day, although this is Britain so I won't hold my breath.
Further proof: I don't usually read fan fiction. Mainly because I don't ever know enough about the bands in question to understand them, but also because it's just something I don't really do. However, I knew from the start that I would like this story. (General praise shall be supplied in a comment at a later time. I'm meant to be getting up soon to go to the passport office; I have a feeling that may not happen...)

If I can help you with idea's for a re-write, I am more than willing, it's such a lovely story, and I am in love with Sunny and Alex. What is it that you don't like about the story? Is it a general dislike or anything in particular?

EDIT

Guys, can you read the first chapter of this for me? I know the rest of the story is pretty abysmal, and it needs re-writing but I'm wondering if the first chapter is okay?

Blackjack.:

Guys, can you read the first chapter of this for me? I know the rest of the story is pretty abysmal, and it needs re-writing but I'm wondering if the first chapter is okay?

If I were you, I would get rid of the commentary in parenthesis, unless that will be a recurring theme throughout the story. To me, it just seems a little unnecessary. The chapter also needs a little bit of editing, as you're missing some punctuation here and there. Other than those minor corrections, I think the first chapter is excellent. You start out with a bit of mystery and danger, dropping the reader right into the action. It's good, and I think you have a really cool idea.

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I just started a new story called Familiar Faces, and I have the first chapter up. But the second chapter is giving me trouble. I know where I eventually want to go with the story, and I adore the idea, but I can't figure out where to go from chapter one. Help?
Also, comments about the first chapter would be nice, too.
Thanks!