Harmony77uk / Comments

he reminds me of haley williams right now hahahaha. there's this poster of the whole band, before the farro brothers left, and she's wearing this stripped shirt and it just made me think of that

well, thanks, but commas indicate where a reader's supposed to breathe if they're reading your story out loud. otherwise, they'd pass out from not breathing. if you read it out loud you'd probably hear where they'd need to go, but i'll look again if you want me to.

alright, i'm sleep deprived lol so i'm bound to make mistakes. so sue me :p

waaaaah i can't believe it's almost over!

i've seen that picture lol. i can't tell if it's orange or blonde again, i'd rather it be orange than bleach blonde. however, i wouldn't mind the black parade blonde lol

oh alright hahaha. i wasn't sure. just two left? :(

ok, so i'm gonna comment while reading ok?

1st paragraph: the first sentence kinda confused me, i think you left out a comma and the syntax is a little weird.

2nd paragraph: you don't "get" afraid, you "become" afraid.

4th paragraph: "temptations" should be "temptation's"

6th paragraph: missing commas again and i think "days" should be "day's"?

9th paragraph: "press" should be "pressed"

overall i really liked it! that was just me being nitpicky lol. it kinda reminded me of the epilogue of sunshine when frank did the same thing. he's inside his head thinking everything over and then it's like BAM out of nowhere he slips out the razor blade and cuts himself.

again, though, really good! you just need commas and such and maybe fix the first sentence of the first paragraph and the third sentence. i had to reread them a few times before i got it

that was supposed to be the next song? i thought it was destroya, but yeah, i'm not impressed with this new video at all. so i guess killjoys really do die....i wanted to see how they'd end it. i'm pretty pissed dude

ur welcome i really love that story

well he actually came right as they finished round one. there was going to be a second round, but then he comes in and breaks it up lol, cause i'm mean like that :p

and i assumed there would be, i don't think frank would want his attractions and employees hooking up lol

ur welcome i really enjoyed it

well i guess that would've made sense, but still. lol i know an ipad and a car are not the same thing, but you'd think they'd keep a record, but i guess not.

i hope we both get some inspiration!

dude i would've complained to who you got it from. they should tell you that it had been repaired before! it's like those commercials for used cars...there's the fox that pops up and he's like "show me the car facts"

i don't know how much that is over here but if you say it's good i'll take your word for it lol

oh my god how did that happen? that was relatively new wasn't it? i remember you telling me about it...summer perhaps?

how much is a new one gonna cost?

oh that's great. i was at one of my friends from this website's house last night and i got a couple paragraphs written, but got a couple ideas as well, which is good.

oh noes :( that's why you bring a charger with you!!! :p

ugh sorry dude. i've never had problems with a boss, probably because i've never had a job besides a summer one and i've been working for the same guy for like 8 summers...

lol i hope so too. i bet that'll feel so good telling him to fuck off hahahaha :p

excitedddd!

Hey.Hey. =D

i got some writing done today...made it to the top of the next page lol. well, i'm actually nearing the next page...so it's alright, not sure if i like what came out though.

ooooh can't wait. i'm excited to see how the ending comes about.

yeah, i don't mind the quiet...the only thing that sucks is i haven't been able to write anything. i tried earlier but wrote like a sentence before going on to do something else waaaaaaaaaah :( i need to get back in the habit of it. maybe when i get back into homework lol :p

well, i like being surprised...and who knows, i still have some time to guess

lol i'm glad you had fun at your concert! i had a pretty quiet new year's. just went over to my bestie's and hung out with her family. pretty uneventful but i like it that way lol

oh cool. can't wait!

that's really cool, i'm very happy for you. when you get published i better see me in the acknowledgements lol :p just kidding hahaha

i need to read the comments better lol cause i swore i saw nyc, but that's cool, i hope you have fun!

hahahaah i win :p

oh niiiice, is that the woman who really likes it? i guess so, that's awesome dude!

i thought you said the gig was in NYC, i only saw the ny part hahaha. my bad

Well Happy New Year!! Hope it's great.

Ohh well I hope you take the time to get some rest atleast!! I understand though.Here lately I have been a total wreck. =/ I keep losing friends for silly reasons and it's just starting to get to me.I've also been doing alot of thinking and that usually never ends up good lol.

lol oh is that why? i guess that's where the phrase "be drunk and merry" comes from? but yes, thank you that made me happy lol :p

whoa, that's cool!! see better things happen for you outside this website, awesome :)

i don't think i've heard of that band before but that's awesome. when's the show?