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Yeah we do :) Though I am working hard at being less shy around others, so far though, it's been a failure :P But I am so hopelessly into acting and am looking for auditions as we speak. Just nothing for someone my age has turned up yet.
And really? What shows/music do you listen to?

Thank you so very very much for the poem comment and I appreciate the constructive criticism, thank you so very much. <3

Ohh nah I don't mind go ahead :)

lesbian voodoo princess was a joke poem done for a friend lol you didnt have to read that one.

here is my second and fire draft, which one do you prefer?

Fire, fire , its burning bright
so don’t come anywhere near me
before you get burnt, leave
or youll be gone eternally

Fire Fire, scorching your remains
In the trail of anger it leaves
theres no control, theres no hold
and the smoke makes it hard to breathe

Fire Fire, the sweltering heat
which starts inside my mind
It seeps out and disappears
leaving everyone behind

Fire Fire, i shouldn’t have begun
you shouldn’t have let me grow
Because once I’m born, that is it
there’s no stopping me anymore

Death and Blaze. Ruin and disaster
that’s all that is left in my name
an angry trail, a forbidden path
I have only myself to blame

Fire Fire oh what have I done
I wish I could change the past
but it’s too late, it’s all destroyed
and all that remains is Ash.


btw i love your title! you could even use others similar like i dunno 'homage to the elements' or 'hail the elements' 'homage to the guardians' but i prefer your title :)

aw thats so nice of you both thankyou!! i got a draft two i like it better as well, can i use it? x

Okie dokie. I'll work on it in my free time (if I find any.)

[b]v[/b]. Fire poem is really good. :3

ok< ive written a draft of fire, i like itbut work can always be done obviously, and id love your input, :)

Fire, fire , burning bright
Lighting up, im glowing
distinguishing everything ever so slowly
though a part of you is unknowing
Fire Fire, destroying your remains
In the trail of anger it leaves
No control, no hold
The smoke makes it hard for you to breathe
Fire Fire, a sweltering heat
which starts inside my mind
It works its way out and disappears
then it will leave you behind
Fire Fire, i shouldn’t have begun
you shouldn’t have let me grow
Because once I’m born, that is it
there’s no stopping me anymore
Death, Blaze. Ruin and disaster
that’s all that is left in my name
an angry trail, a forbidden path
I have only myself to blame
Fire Fire oh what have I done
I wish I could change the past
but it’s too late, it’s all destroyed
and all that remains is Ash.

Thanks :) I was considering doing so. I have two different drafts of the edited version, and I'm uncertain which I like, so I'll have to mull it over a little.

Thank you so much for the comment :D it was really nice and insightful, I tend to just go on and on in poems, I forget to make sure they make sense sometimes, I'll look out for that now, and I'll be fixing my poem up. I probably won't upload the finished version, because then your comment won't make sense, and personally I hate it when my comment doesn't make sense, but I'm like that :)

Thank you for all of the compliments too! That was so kind of you :D I've read your writing too - absolutely amazing! I mean, wow! I'm generally not very opinionated so I'm bad at leaving comments, I mean I tried to leave some but they wouldn't do your poems justice.

Well the Isle of Man is a... smallish place. It's in-between the UK and Ireland, and it's population is about 80,000, which surprises me. I live in the capital Douglas, by the way. The main language is of course English, and the Isle of Man's own language is Manx, which is a dead language which very few people actually know/learn. Those are more "srs bsnss" facts. Less serious facts would be like we only have a few chain take-out places, which everyone hates (with only one McDonalds, one Subway, one KFC, one Dominoes and the rest are weird companies which aren't very good.) I'm sure you could look up anything else, if you're still interested, but we're not a very exciting place..

It's good, I like your vocabulary. It kinda reminds of the way I used to write.

thank you for the poem comment :)

Funny, just minutes before your comment, I opened my Air poem and thought, "Should I finish it?" and then I said, "Nah, I'll do it later." :) So, nope. But I could if you have everyone's poem ready. I'm good under pressure. :D
6 more lines? That's tricky but a good challenge! (;

that's basically exactly what it was about. I'm glad that I was able to communicate the message and not be too confusing. :)

Me too, haha.

Woot, woot! YES!

That's okay, it got taken care of :)

And yeah, I prefer Canadian spelling on a lot of things :) Unfortunately our version of English is a dying breed, since computers go by American style soon we'll just be integrated with Americans (languages wise).

thanks for being so understanding

And yeah, I've done that in poems before and was sad because it's difficult to come up with a word that conveys what you want and still sounds good.
And you're welcome :) Just returning the favor ^.^

Yep, it's because it is the Canadian spelling of the word :)

And I was talking about excepted, which should be *expected and chade which should be *shade. Unless you meant to spell it that way? If you did, it kind of looks strange in my opinion.