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Thank you for the comment on not enough, and everything is... well I'm in recovery from almost everything I've been struggling with, hopefully I can get through everything soon enough (:

Thanks for the comment on "Celeste 1".
Since you're the first to comment, I guess you got all the rough edges to look at.
I have edit the story several times, but it's first now I have the chance to actually see it from the outside.
Since you're required to read only a single chapter for the comment, but there is more available, everything I've posted here could be relevant.
The bracelets have been mentioned earlier, and would be mentioned again later.
What I need to get right, is the scene, and the feel for the girl, who is the narrative focus, I think.
Not sure if I captured her essence in this story.

Thank you very much for the in depth commentary, I will certainly take all of that into account and rewrite my first two chapters!

LOL Well quizilla is well that website. I am actually still on there because I have a story that needs to end sadly. Also the sex part of the story is how vampires get there way. Also they are old and from times where sex was popular. Theo and Marcus are Romans and they used to have a lot of sex. since Ora was around those guys often she grew up thinking that's how it is to be that way. Then it went down to her children ect ect. ( I meant to write that in the last comment but it slipped my mind and I would have felt like an assclown sending another comment. LOL) Caleb wasn't really not into it.

I've read a lot of stories but I've never seen the gay best friend minus in one story. I just wanted to show a different world from what people have seen. Especially a world like New York City since I have grown up there and there is a lot of gay men living there. (and gay woman of course.) SO in my story I try to show off all the minorities rather then just it being a typical story. And a gay man coming out in the hood is very dangerous and very different.

And with my vampire story well she wants to find him because she loves him, she has gotten over the horrible things. Or she says she did. And it's her maker. Makers and there vampire children have a bond that will never be broken even if they wanted it to. And she's not a Queen...she was kidding which is why she said "Why would I want to be a Queen. I would hear everyone's little pathetic problems." She just thinks she could be a queen because she thinks she is better than everybody and everyone is beneath her. Edgar doesn't do drugs he did before he turned to a vampire, and that's why she picked him to become one. Thee blood that's their drug.

When she said "I understand why Edgar does drugs." It was just a matter of a statement that he will always be a drug addict to her because she doesn't see him more than that. She's kind of a bitch and uses people and wants people to love her anyways.

Thanks a lot for your comment on 'A Villiage Legend'! It kinda helps that I did the layout on old Mibba when it was easier!! :P

As for the story, it was my first attempt at a gothic horror type fic which is probably why parts seem a bit cliche! I did try to make the creature as original as possible and build it up to create the horror, so I'm pleased that came across.

Thanks again :)
Jen xx

You seem to be full of negative criticism.

Hi :) thanks for the comment on Being Left To The Flood. I called it that because I am really bad at thinking of titles, and I was listening to a song called Runaway by The National when writing it, and that line is repeated. I can understand your comment about why her brother didn't go to the police and I agree it is depressing. I'm sorry you couldn't keep reading it, but thank you so much for commenting :)

Thanks of the comment on A Tiny Little Dot. I know it's cliche. It's kind of supposed to be. I wanted to take a cliche story and transform it into something dark and sick.

Thanks for the comment on "Yasmine's Choice:".
Guess I do make the occasional typo and grammatical error, the later is much harder to check.
I'll try some details into the story, and a few characters along the way.
*From the looks, the story is far from concluded, more of starting it up?I know I have more chapters lined up, that I will post.

I live in Virginia, and we had a HUGE storm here on Friday. So I'm actually without power right now. I grab internet at random places when I go. So I'm a bit delayed on my writing process. <_<

Thanks for the great comment! I'm so glad you like my story so much! I look back on it and think it's terrible. xD I mean I love my story, but it's just so long and a ton of parts are unnecessary. Someday I hope to go back someday and rewrite it, refine it, and make it better and maybe get it published. Anyway, glad you liked it. And unfortunately I probably wont have a chapter out till Monday maybe. I'm pretty busy this weekend.

thanks for commenting on Control! I always love hearing from my readers!

thank you for the comment on my story. :)

Thank you so much for the lovely comments on my story, Polkadot.
thank you <3

Hey there,
Thank you so much for the story comment.
I really appreciate it!!!
^__^

-Belle

Thank you very much for the comment on Eden! <3
You are free from the darkness now.

Thanks for the comment!

Thank you for the comment you left on Onward and Upward. It meant a lot to us!