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My thing with editing is this: like writing, it takes practice.

I've been writing and editing for a while, so I finish them a lot faster than I did at first. I'm STILL editing "Dousing the Phoenix," which I wrote over six months ago. It was my first "real" story, and, as such, it has the most problems as far as accessibilty is concerned. So I keep going back and tweaking.

However, a story like "Joseph's Dream" I wrote in a single day and finished editing over the next three. Just takes practice.

But see what I mean? That kind of thing only comes after hours of editing and re-editing. Actually, the tentacles of words and command you to feel thing came as if in a dream, but the rest of it was all hard work. Learn to love editing, and you'll realize that you become more proud of your stories and impressed with your abilities as a writer.

I did have to polish it. How else could I add paragraphs like this:

I want to wrap tentacles of words around each of your billions of nerve endings and command you to feel. But how can I command without knowing how to speak? Maybe I can make you feel, but feel what? And why? We can’t describe it because we don’t know the words, and we can’t make the words because we don’t know how. I guess that’s the finite system. We can only change as far as our boundaries allow, whether those boundaries are expanding or not. How can you conduct a symphony while you’re still writing it?

New stuff on your profile.ü

Well, maybe too many adjectives. I do really like "A Lack of Color." It's also quite raw. I like the aggressive feel second person lends to it; hell, I almost wrote "A Mobius of Names" in the second person.

Yeah, it very much does.

Wow, this one was your favorite? I like it too, but think it needs a little more polishing (don't worry, it'll still look like it was written in one sitting; I'm no amateur at stream of consciousness). My favorite is either Joseph's Dream or Dousing the Phoenix. I think my favorite of yours is Ocean Eyes.

Check out my latest story if you want to see what happens when I give you the full show.

Wanting the full show. It seems like your head's a fairly interesting place.

Yes I do.

Sorry it's taking so long. I've mixed feelings so far. Some parts are knock me down and slap my ass amazing, but others, I think, are products of your being a young writer who sometimes slips grammatically or doesn't know what to leave out and what to keep. You have a real knack for writing, and I promise to get into the specifics with "A Lack of Color."

yeah thanks

nothing really

Very well. Added the one I wrote last night. It's ok. Not as good as the other four.

Hey whats up?

I am. I'll read you soon, but I may want a review in return. I don't care which piece. They're all good enough.

my mother said the best thing you can give to your husband is your virginity . meh . and i abide by that .

Nope, no deviant art.

Your such a good writer I have no clue on why you don't have lots of comments for your stories. (=


*Lonna

That's not bad, I'll comment when I'm not still under the influence of those other pieces.

Oh, also I wrote a third story, but that only took a day.