October 16th, 2010 at 06:56am
Like what [b]AmorarEsDeVivir[/b] said, the repetition really stands out here, especially the whole "push pull repeat" (which I loved, btw). It's kind of ironic because the "repeat" can be describing both the actions in the poem and the actual repetition itself, which I found cool. I also love the personification of heroin, like it's a person that's actually controlling you and giving you that rush that you love so much. The lines "I hardly even know her / I trust her with my life" really bring the whole addiction thing into focus.
And then that last line "honey I'll be your heroin"...gahh. Genius xD Again, you really pulled the personification off so well here. Well done!
It's amazing. Loved it!