That's A Lie - Comments

Whoa, this is GOOD. I love it. If you don't continue, I don't know what i'll do to you.

CONTINUE! I love this!

xD *subscribes*

I really love your writing. You shall be one of my writing mentors :D

uhoh... don't let Frankie do something silly will you??
This is good, keep it comin' keep it comin'

nice update , emmy !

and forever sound too long for them to be apart ! :cheese:

tell me when you have more . :D

Over all, this is very well written. The plot is nice. And that is saying something because I normally disklike Waycest. I was pulled in by the lighthouse bit. Not many people include lighthouses in their stories. :lol:

Just watch your grammar. I saw a few slips here and there. Try a little more sensory images.
(don't take that too seriously because I tell a lot of people that. it's just my style. ;])

=O
Amazing update.
Can't wait for more!

hehe, page pwn.

HOLY SHIT!!!
dude you have to update...like now lol,

this story is soooo good! i totally love it, keep writing!
i love your writing style!

MORE SOON!!!

Almost forgot... I LOVE the pic on your layout. The green and magenta color scheme wasn't too great, but I ADORE the picture. Maannnn... Haha. That's all.

This story has a looot of potential, I can feel it...

I still want you to play up on the incest and Frank and Emira stuff a bit more, but other than that, it's getting good.

I'm sad that Donna doesn't understand and jumped to conclusions (which turned out to be true), and that Donald just doesn't friggin' care, and also about the rift it's causing between the brothers... I'd love for things to be happy again, but I know it can't be that way, so I'll wait and see what you'll cook up for us.

I'll subscribe, because I wanna see what happens next. :D

*fan girl squeal!!!
Soooo cute!!!!
You're a really good author with your imagery and use of emotions...
wow
Update soon
Imma subscribe

Sooo good! More please! ^__^

Ohmigosh! It's so awesome so far!! Write more soon!

i only have time for chapter one right now.
but it seems good i like it ...alot it's different...keep going :)

ierogasm:

your 12? no way. your writing shows immense maturity!
your use of similies [like a plague] was intriguing. and "sinful ways” set an eerie-ness about the scene.

your plot line was original and well planned. the background and text colour is a bit of a problem, its difficult to read, maybe sticking to the default layour would be better.
repition of the "the one folder" was really good aswell.

It was Mikey. that part was really mysterious.

i honestly cant say anything bad to say, just try to fix the colours and format and it will be perfect :)

Okay thanks for the help.
I'll change it.
Thanks once again!

XoXo
Emmy

your 12? no way. your writing shows immense maturity!
your use of similies [like a plague] was intriguing. and "sinful ways” set an eerie-ness about the scene.

your plot line was original and well planned. the background and text colour is a bit of a problem, its difficult to read, maybe sticking to the default layour would be better.
repition of the "the one folder" was really good aswell.

It was Mikey. that part was really mysterious.

i honestly cant say anything bad to say, just try to fix the colours and format and it will be perfect :)

Me likey, me likey!!, but of course me likey - you wrote it!!
keep this going!! it's awesome!!

squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee !!!

i love it ! uaaaaaaaah ! XD

O_O .. nice one , emmy !

i like it ! and i like hearing from the author more , so ping me when you've updated !

xo , 'nadine . :hug:

i love it its brilliant finish it soon pwwwwwwwwease

Geriya:

HOLY SHIT!
This is really good.
Seriously.
Really good.
I haven't even read all of it (and it's only one chapter) and already I subscibed and felt the need to smother you and your story with comments.
More soon, please?
When you get a chance, of course.