A new light - Comments

Nice update. I think it was cool to see her interacting again at work, and the starting a family thing was funny. It was good to take a step in a different direction for a chapter.

"“Darling, we’re at the bar next to the old theatre, you’ve been here before right?” Jyrki questioned..... “Yes I do..” I sighed..." It should be "Yes, I have." don't you think? Have you been here? Yes I do, doesn't make too much sense lol.

But anyway, I can't wait to read the next chapter and to see what happens with her and Jyrki, especially since Ville is there too. Should make things interesting :) ;)

love love love! I love how raven's boss assumes that the reason behind her cutting back is to start a family and love how abusive Ville's friends are with him, lol. Got to say, this is a great way to start off my birthday week!! XD wonderful update as always darling and can't wait for more!!

-Kassandra

Well I think we all like reading the close scenes with Jyrki as much as you enjoy writing them, so continue lol :)
It was a good update and I enjoyed reading it. I don't really have any feedback to give you, I just want another update soon because I love this story so much lol.
Hope you feel better soon (the whole wisdom teeth thing)

gah! i loved this! all of this :) hehe. and tobias is a hoot. seems like a hilarious guy. good to hear you're nearly recovered :)

Aw, having wisdom teeth removed sucks *hugs*
Fabulous update, cannot wait for more!
And I love Tobias, he sounds like a great guy to work with :)

eppp lovely chapter!!

Eugh, i have 3 wisdom teeth just starting to come through and they kill!!! I hope you are recovering well xD

love love loved the chapter. i love how the realtionship of teasing with jyrki and Raven is very give and take, and i love that jyrki doesn't even relize what i tease he's being lol. XD I also love teh realtionship between Raven and tobias, how they can go from friends to cowrokers back to friends in .5 seconds. Wondefully done!!

-Kassandra

Aw, it's so cute! And Jussi's present is quite funny. I really loved this chapter
As for Misconnected, I've read it and I like the story, I'd love to see what you change if you do rewrite it. <3

Oh the excitement I get when I see you have updated this story.... :D
But anyway,

This was such a cute chapter! I really think he went OTT with her birthday and that shows he really cares for her, which is great. It's him showing he's serious, and that's what we all want to read :)
I think it's extremely awesome how he got a couch and blanket and all of her presents on a rooftop in the middle of Helsinki. That would be such a great view and I'd love to be doing that instead of Raven lol It really sounded like something special and I don't know what I would have done if that had happened to me.... Probably get overwhelded....

Liked also how Jussi's present was random, although once Jyrki said a blow-up doll I wasn't expecting Twilight....
I think when he pulled her onto his lap, she could have described it a bit more, with how she was feeling. Did she become nervous, excited, get that butterfly feeling, enjoy his torso against her back, etc? I think a bit more emotion there would have really topped off the chapter.

And, with the whole Misconnected thing, I don't read it, but I do think you should do whatever you think is best. But by the sounds of it, you may as well write a whole new story, if you get what I mean? If you're making dramatic changes, it might be better to start again. But I don't know. You do whatever you want.
Just looking at the summary of that story though, you need the pictures in the Character page, and the summary needs to be really short. What you have there should be Chapter 1 or a Prologue/Intro. Hope that helps! :)

But it was a good update - I really enjoyed reading and I can't wait until you post the next one! Hopefully it's soon! :D

srsly coming home for lunch, this is the best thiing i could find in my mail box...well that and all of HIM and The 69 Eyes wrapped up in a bow :P But still, great great thing to come home to! Loved the update and I adore Jyrki's present to raven!! :D

As for Misconnected, IMO, if YOU feel like you need to rewrite it, then i would. I have some stories that i feel that way about, so i know how you feel lol. I have a few stories floating around out there that i think need to be rewritten because imo, with the age that i wrote them they just aren't up to par. :D Hope that helps :D

All in all wonderful update!

-Kassandra

Hahahaa, this chap made me laugh so much, and it was so sweeet!!!! eeep, i'm defo going to check your other story!!

Brilliant chapter, darling, and I'm thrilled that you've decided to re-do Misconnected. I always did love that story, even if the writing could have been improved. And I hope to see that wonderful banner that a certain someone made for you *cough cough*
Haha, sorry. Moment of shameless self-promotion over. Well done, love. Keep it up, you really are great !

Great chapter. By the way, I'd love to read the rewrite of Misconnected :)

I love the chapter! Jyrki sounds so fabulous, he's really rather impressive.
I can't wait for the next chapter <3

I absolutely adored this chapter. Jyrki sounds like such a great guy to date. He really had me impressed ;) hehe. I looked back at the last chapter too and I thought that the edit was perfect. It's much smoother now. Keep up the good work!

Then his hand joined in, previously resting comfortably on my shoulder, started travelling now.. studying curves of its own. my Favorite line, while it's short and sweet, it gives off such vivid imgary and mood.

Loved the chapter, loved how jyrki did his homework and made sure to take raven somewhere he knew she'd appricate! Can't wait to see whats next!!

-Kassandra

This was a really cool chapter. I really enjoyed reading it, although the last bit I found could have been a bit clearer. I'm confused as to why she called him an asshole, and also, to just make it really clear that she's attracted to him, I would have liked to read a bit more emotion/feeling when he was touching her, which would make her 'sudden attack' more natural, if you know what I mean? But I really enjoyed reading and I can't wait for the next chapter! You ended it with a great line from Jyrki. I'm dying for more!!! :)

Ohh god, i wish someone would get an entire art gallery for me!!! ahhh well, a girl cn dream!! Great update!

Loved the update...it was so romantic!!! Jyrki is so proud, it great!!!! <3

Lovely chapter! How you've written Jyrki really makes me smile, I can picture every scene in my head. I can't wait to see how the two develop through their relationship. More soon?? <3