Haha, love when Colin goes, "Ooohh a boy?" because that sounds exactly like something my own dad would say to me. >.< Why are dads so weird? Haha.
I also liked how she was basically torturing herself all evening about what Laney meant Zack was good with.. and then she has her own little fantasy about him. Mmm, we've all been there before with past crushes.
her parent were nice! Now what kind of daddy would want his daughter to be more than just friends with a boy....a damn cool one! :lmfao Who wouldn't think of Zacky inn a sexual way :XD hes gorgeous! :tehe:
i love fluffy stories.. tho I can imagine there's going to be more bitchiness and trauma coming up.. just look at the nasty comments flying to Sarah from the bitch pack already
and yep, I bet Matt was even scary as a baby :lmfao I bet he came flying out swearing and scowling
You're meant to be a writer. Seriously. I've been looking for a cheesy story! And since you said that's exactly what this story is going to be, I really hope you don't let me down (Which is impossible). Bring on the cheesiness! The more the better lol Can't wait for more =D
Two more spelling errors.. in the first paragraph it says But that would entail that they actually few up instead of acting like children.. I'm assuming few is supposed to be grew? Also, Stopping out of the way of the door,. Stopping is meant to be stepping? .. do you hate me already for doing this? Hahaha. I feel like such a bitch pointing out minor errors like this. XD
Annnnyway.. this is my second fave story as of now. I vote you post a second update of this tomorrow, haha, since you said you wanted to get it out fast. ;) *hinthint* <3
I nearly expected the red headed girl to be Val but nawww didn't happen that way.. Matt's acting like a turd in this chapter.. Zach should hit him or something. XD
Pssssssssssssssssssssssssst =D LOVED IT!! Seriously, it's awesome. But I now want to know what's crawled up Matt's arse!! I mean really!! That boy needs to be smacked round the back of the head. GRRR. Other than that.......I want Zacky. Lol. Seriously, he's so cute in this story.
Uggghhh... I HATE stuck up bitches like the ones in the first chapter! All poor Sarah wants to do is fit in but they're being stuck up COWS themselves! Grrr. GO EAT A FUCKING SANDWICH YOU STICK INSECTS! I can't imagine how hard it is moving to a new school; I've never had to do it.
But I LOVED when "Amanda" showed up in the second chapter. Everyone needs a best friend; she sounds like she'll make life at high school alot easier. I love how she just rambles on alot, haha.. kinda reminds me of myself. :D
I love this line from Zach: "Well, no one's like them. They're fucking retarded,". Bwhahaha.. trust Zach to be so subtle, lol. I love how he's friendly to Sarah - they're going to make such a cute couple!
Strangely enough, I love these high school based stories.. probobaly alot easier to read now that I'm not in high school anymore and I can read about other people going through the same thing I did whilst thinking, "Sooo fucking glad it's not me anymore." XD
Nyaaaww, the bright pink layout sets you up for how much of a sickeningly sweet and sappy love story this is going to be.. but of course I eat that shit up and you knows it. :file:
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Haha, love when Colin goes, "Ooohh a boy?" because that sounds exactly like something my own dad would say to me. >.< Why are dads so weird? Haha.
I also liked how she was basically torturing herself all evening about what Laney meant Zack was good with.. and then she has her own little fantasy about him. Mmm, we've all been there before with past crushes.