Hold Me Close, I'll Kiss Away Your Fears - Comments

  • Sullivan1981

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    oh Zacky, you're so sweet, bless you, confessing you think Sarah is adorable... like we didn't already know that you felt that way ...

    ... and I think your cat has extremely good taste, he/she was only wanting to see what's going to happen next :lmfao
    August 11th, 2009 at 07:33pm
  • HeartFailure

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    I'm very happy that your cat didn't rip your throat out!!
    Cat's are mean. My cat always attacks me for no reason. Lol.

    On with the chapter, I LOVED IT.
    I love how you have portrayed Zacky in this story. He's so adorable.
    And Matt's a butthead. I wanna kick him please =P
    Can't wait for more!! x
    August 11th, 2009 at 10:43am
  • Rocket Queen

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    Oh! And I just realised I forgot to comment last week's update! Gah! Ok, so I liked the AIM convo going on between them and usually I hate when someone does that in a story but that's only because their whole chapter is usually FILLED with it without any descrip of the characters and their actions. But you incorporated it nicely.
    August 11th, 2009 at 10:08am
  • Rocket Queen

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    And every few nights Sarah would have a lengthy conversation online with Zack, about any and everything. -- drop the s from nights.
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    Haha, the convo between Amanda and Zack was great - I don't think things are moving along too fast at all. ;) I love how he was honest in saying that he probably wouldn't be interested in her if he wasn't her friend..'specially since teenage boys can be sooo shallow sometimes.
    August 11th, 2009 at 10:06am
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    EEk! Loved it! Amanda and Brian are cute hehe And Zacky! Finally admitting it! I can't wait for the next one! Sorry for not commenting lately. I moved and had no internet connection. Forgive me? =D

    Sorry about your neck, hope it's not bleeding too much. Bad kitty!
    August 11th, 2009 at 01:41am
  • Ultraviolet Light

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    I loved the update!
    Zacky so likes Sarah! :tehe:
    August 11th, 2009 at 01:23am
  • cynicalqueen

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    I really hate Matt in this fanfiction Mandy. Zack and Sarah need to get together, this update was amazing. I love how you write Zack's character, sweet but cocky.
    August 5th, 2009 at 03:36am
  • BethanyVengeance

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    YAY UPDATE :D
    It was brilliant!
    Matts an arsehole for saying Brian kissed another girl
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    Zacky && Sarah need to get together (:
    But yeah, amazing update :D
    More sooon?
    x
    August 4th, 2009 at 07:47pm
  • HeartFailure

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    Totally loved it, as I always do.
    I love the way you've written Zacky in this story. He's so cocky, but sweet.
    Can't wait for more!! x
    August 3rd, 2009 at 11:02pm
  • Ultraviolet Light

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    I liked the update!
    I wonder why Matt is so pissy. I think he just needs some lovin' of his own. :tehe: I would so give him some lovin'
    August 3rd, 2009 at 10:44pm
  • Oooh Zing

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    I love it! :arms:
    August 3rd, 2009 at 10:16pm
  • BethanyVengeance

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    I rather love this story! :D
    Moremoremoremore?
    x
    July 30th, 2009 at 12:35pm
  • cynicalqueen

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    "No homo or anything...but those jeans make your ass look...like...insanely good."

    Oh my gosh, that cracked me up. Seriously... I could see you saying something like that. I see some Amanda and Brian scenes in the near future... maybe my crystal ball's a little fuzzy, haha. Loved it!
    July 29th, 2009 at 01:06am
  • Sullivan1981

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    ooh.. she's given Zack Sarah's user name I bet...
    ... and I wonder what Brian has to speak to Amanda about ?
    mmmm. I'm curious....
    July 28th, 2009 at 11:46pm
  • HeartFailure

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    Loved the update as always =D made me smile. x
    July 28th, 2009 at 06:42am
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    "No homo or anything...but those jeans make your ass look...like...insanely good."

    I actually lol'd at that! Great update, I see Brian and Amanda action coming alongg.. ;D
    July 28th, 2009 at 06:09am
  • Ultraviolet Light

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    so di damanda give brian sarahs screan name? hahaha i wonder what kinda trouble thats gonna get her into! :tehe:
    July 28th, 2009 at 05:07am
  • BlackAshes

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    I don't get it! What's happening! Update again!!!! =D Pleasseeeeeeeee? I wanna read the next one! And you know you want to update =)
    July 28th, 2009 at 04:31am
  • Rocket Queen

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    The title of the chapter, 'Sleepover', is spelt wrong - you forgot the 'o'. :tehe:

    Within the first paragraph Matt's name doesn't have a capital - not sure if that counts, but figured I'd let you just in case.

    Sarah had been a bit curious about Amanda's former relationship with Brian and watned to ask questions, but she figured she'd wait. -- wanted is spelt wrong.

    "Gimma your name, and I'll put you in." -- Gimma just doesn't look right. Is it meant to be gimme?

    "Said he needed to talk t you and would call you later." -- and t should be to.

    YourMomOnSteroids: ] mysexylegoman -- should the bracket before mysexylegoman be there? I wasn't sure.

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    Ok, so this line made me lawl for real: "Oh my God," Amanda practically squealed as she looked Sarah over in the hall of the dressing rooms. "No homo or anything...but those jeans make your ass look...like...insanely good." because I can totally picture you saying something like that, haha.

    I'm loving the friendship between Sarah and Amanda because it just seems sooo real. Not forced or fake or anything - totally real. I can believe that they are friends.

    Ahhhh you're torturing us with that last bit! Amanda soooo told Zack to add Sarah, haha. I'm even more anxious to read more. XD
    July 28th, 2009 at 03:48am
  • cynicalqueen

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    Cat, you are psychic!

    Her parents were abolutely hilarious when they were teasing their daughter. Too cute for words. I felt so sad when she was torturing herself because she doesn't think she would ever be more than friends with him after what Laney said. Loved it, =)
    July 26th, 2009 at 11:44pm