December 11th, 2007 at 06:58am
Cirque des Anges - Comments
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Omg. I just love these chapters. I read the last two chapters. I could see the rain dropping down and feel it as well. I was shivering the whole time. You write really well.November 23rd, 2007 at 06:51am
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Okay, I'm really horrible with the reviewing part, but I can read, I believe. Just to start this off, this is different from what I ever read on Mibba. I loved the way to used your description throughout the story fluently. As I was reading, I didn't really catch any major flaws, but I easily skip over minor mistakes. All and all, I really like the story. Sorry if this is pretty short, but like I said, I'm not good at writing reviews.November 7th, 2007 at 03:53am
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October 29th, 2007 at 05:00am -
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Thank you :DOctober 27th, 2007 at 11:26am -
Andi! I could see everything that you wrote like I was looking at it through my own eyes. It's so good.October 27th, 2007 at 07:34am
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What an amazing update! I loved this update. You are a very good author.October 20th, 2007 at 07:25am
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You've done it again :D
The joker's return had really sent the creeps throughout my body. Raven, my dear, a monster is so far from what you’ve become. Be grateful, my child, you’ll soon see.
Isabella's shock from the fact that Peris was just a boy (In appearance maybe but still) pretty much resembled my own.
Again, the descriptions were amazing and so well written. I think you know more words than I do! :lmfoa
I know this review is shorter than the last one but it's because I said all I have to say. :D
Oh and the name change? Clever.October 17th, 2007 at 04:54pm -
Like it!October 16th, 2007 at 12:02pm
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I'm speechless. I just read the last chapter of your story and it's amazing. The detail is perfect, grammar and spelling perfect. It's amazing.
You have a way with words.October 11th, 2007 at 08:23am -
Cirque Des Anges:
The first paragraph drew me in instantly, plus the plot is very original.
But sadly I've only read the first chapter because I am in a hurry, but I will edit this and I mean it. I promise, as I added this to my favorite links page.
The descriptions are lovely, along with the ones of your characters.
Your pen can say so much by using so little words. Meaning : You've used little words but with big meaning.
I'd love to read the rest of this and add more to this review and I will. (Just tell me when and I will either PM it to you or post it on the [Fan]fiction cult's thread.
Without one glance backward, she’d left the comfort and warmth of her parent’s house to make the mile and a half journey to the circus where she could submerse herself in the hustle and bustle of a thousand flashing neon lights and the rowdy screams of the undesirable crowds that swarmed the circus Friday nights; anything to get away from the pain, from the heartache, from the cruel life of a fifteen year old misfit.
Do I need to say more?
I've read the rest of the chapters and here's what I have to add add to what I said:
I re-read the first chapter again as I proceeded in the progress of reading them all and I have to say it's better than the first time that I read It :D The description of the three children was outstanding!
The candle flickered as if an invisible wind had swept through the open tent flap and tickled it; long fingers of an invisible wind pulling at the feathery flame, pulling it along as if they were dancing to nonexistent music.
I've never read a line describing the wind in that vivid kind of imagery like that in all my life! It was beautifully written and so well resembled.
In chapter three Isabella's dreams were so surreal, they are horrifying when it comes to the imagination due to the gory aspect but very well written with your extraordinary talent of using words you made it beautiful. Yes, you have a talent. You made gore beautiful.
The third night she dreamed of the children; three bodies sprawled across each other on top of a mound of rubbish in a dumpster behind a bar, flies picking at what skin clung to the bones, giant black birds pecking at the multi-colored eyes.
Again, the plot is very original and unique. Not like other vampire fictions which seem to drum the same beat over and over again. Unique.
And how you go and use synynoms in your details is ... I have no words to describe it.
The colors were visualized as if they were seen. The struggle of Isabella's mortal and Vampiric parts was amazing! In other stories the characted probably would be made up to wake up a Vampire just like that, without going through a transition and even if so it wouldn't include pain and the agony of two races of beings fighting to dominate one body.
The reaccurring characher of the joker sent shivers down my spine, his place in Isabella's mind as the opposite of a consience was brilliantly put. Her Angel and her Devil were the same thing.
And at the end where the conflict within her appeared was utterly unexpected. I had the thought that she was finally happy with being one of them. But as vauge as the reason for her odd decision I thought it was amazing. I couldn't chosen something better to review. I really enjoyed reading it and writing this review.
Thank YouOctober 7th, 2007 at 03:48am -
This is simply amazing! I can't wait for more!October 3rd, 2007 at 10:16am
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I keep on forgetting to check my subcriptions.
But all of the updates are amazing.
Your writing is getting better with each chapter.
It's simply amazing. The descriptions make everything so easy to envision.
Lovely updates.
October 1st, 2007 at 02:31am -
:shock: you look like mother war o_O- penguin massacre:
- Its me in the icon; took a picture of myself.
September 29th, 2007 at 10:57pm -
Its me in the icon; took a picture of myself.September 29th, 2007 at 11:30am
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wait, mother war is you? or the duct tape is you? o_OSeptember 29th, 2007 at 10:29am
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Its me!
:tehe:
Couldn't resist the duct tape.September 29th, 2007 at 10:10am -
nooooo problem almighty ruler of the english language
nice icon, btw :DSeptember 29th, 2007 at 10:07am -
hehe
Thank you...againSeptember 29th, 2007 at 10:03am -
holy shit
I now dub you Queen of Descriptions :bows:
you're amazing
more soonSeptember 29th, 2007 at 09:45am
But...I wasn't going to update anymore....I guess I'll try.