September 19th, 2007 at 05:32am
Cirque des Anges - Comments
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the scariest part is that i might actually have understood that. 0.0September 16th, 2007 at 01:01am
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I think I'm done with the goat-related silliness now. XD
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Oh, I get it. You're just going to stop right there and be all "Ha! I so scared you people, didn't I?! You FAIL!!" Well, fine, be that way. ;_;
It's still a great story. :mrgreen:September 15th, 2007 at 01:57pm -
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*thwacks self with common sense*
Why have I not read this before? I know I saw it but for some odd, stupid reason I didn't click.
As Lonna has said, I love your descriptions. They are quite beautiful and really make me stop and think. I can picture everything like it's really happening. I also love how you portrayed the characters, starting off with their actions and placing appearance second (though obviously it's hardly a secondary characteristic O_o). I loved this part especially:
She wandered to the fence of the petting zoo, where a goat stepped forward and bleated pitifully and nudged her hand, obviously asking for food. When nothing was presented, it bit the girl’s fingers and walked off, stiff-legged as if it had spent too many nights on the cold, wet ground.
*hugs the poor goat* I want to take it home so it can be my pal.
And really, how could you not love the adorable creature?
Though I think this is a bit much...
September 15th, 2007 at 11:57am -
Me=idiot.
I never got your reply on the fanfiction cult thread (I rarely check it-_-o), but I'm here now, so if you'd still comment my story, I shall read yours now. Sorry I'm so late.September 15th, 2007 at 11:42am -
ty :DSeptember 6th, 2007 at 01:31pm
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I remembered to come back. So now I can review properly.
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Again I must state that your writing skills are amazing. You really have talent. I also love your originality. I really haven't read something like this before; which is always is plus. I'm speechless. It's very intriguing. I love your simple but descriptive way if writing, it intrigues me. You describe the character very well; I can almost picture the scenery.
Chapter 4 was my favorite chapter yet. I love the way you describe her dreams; it kinfd of creeped me out to tell you the truth. But I love horror in any story so that makes it even better. This deserves more praise. I award you for your originality & your amazing grammar and spelling. I <33 this story.August 30th, 2007 at 06:21am -
yay! thanksAugust 27th, 2007 at 10:42am
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I got through the first chapter, I have school tommorow so I must go. I am going to review the first chapter and I promise tommorow I will give you a review on the rest of the story.
I absolutely love your writing. It's very descriptive but simple, making it so much easier to read. Your choice in words is marvelous, It enthralled me that there were no spelling errors. I also reviewed your grammar; All very well done.
It seems intriguing, The idea for it is original. All though I only got through the first chapter I can tell where this is going, it leaves me in suspense; [I also hate the fact that I can't finish this review properly, courtesy of my mother]
Nothing bothered me at all, It was greatly written. Extravagant use in words;
Overall: Great Job!
P.S
I suscribed.:DAugust 27th, 2007 at 10:41am -
This story wonderfully shows how words can be used in the most beautiful ways. You are such a talented writer, I was in awe while reading the 6th chapter of this story. Your description, and word choice, is simply amazing.
The shadows shifted as he stepped forward, the black cloak whispering around his feet.
For some reason this sentance won't leave my head. I keep seeing it play in my mind. I love how you said "whispering around his feet" instead of something bland and un original. I love originality and that sentance just popped out at me. Such lovely description.
The ending of this chapter was...I just sat her like "wow." Cause even though you guess, and already know, their vampires, the ending just kinda made it real. His response it so simple but you made it into so much more.August 23rd, 2007 at 05:30am -
Sorry it took me so long to read. I’ve been busy. But I did read! Just like I promised. And I really enjoyed it.
It was…definitely different than most stories on here. Though the chapters were short, the had great detail. It made the chapter appear to be longer – but they weren’t.
That made me smile. xD
Other than it being different description wise, it was different plot wise.
Now this is an original vampire story!August 22nd, 2007 at 11:05am -
haha, i try to use some words that i didnt know the meaning of...it might be a little much..August 17th, 2007 at 01:14pm
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i liked it alot. even thr part with the big ass word i dont understand. more please!August 17th, 2007 at 01:02pm
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I am in love with your descriptions and writing style. From your summary, I was instantly hooked with the story. It was wonderful, congratulations
It's most certainly not you average vampire fanfic. You gave the normal vampire plot some sort of twist, which is what most of us want.
Again, good job. :]
[ er.. you have read and commented 'Leading to Nowhere' , right? }August 14th, 2007 at 11:01am -
I agree with HeartlessXSoul, your an amazing writer!!
The way you word things is amazing and from the first sentance I read I was in awe. Seriously, you use such discription that it makes the story so beautiful.
You've got talent. I'm glad I read and reviewed this story. ;)August 12th, 2007 at 11:53am -
Such a great chapter! You are a good writer!August 8th, 2007 at 10:40pm
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thank you. -bowes-August 8th, 2007 at 12:46pm
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i loved every minute of reading this. i cant wait 'til you put up more. please write more quick!August 8th, 2007 at 08:24am
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Wow.......
It is amazing.
You're a great writer.
Keep going.
Lexie X.August 8th, 2007 at 12:57am -
I only read the first chapter because I have to get off the computer, but it was really awesome. Your description is amazing. It's not really my type of story, but it was really well written.August 7th, 2007 at 11:24pm
can't wait to "see" her feed :twisted: