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I have this overwhelming urge to scream...
But since my mom is home I shall suppress it.
That was...that was...so...so...
I don't know. Sad? yes. Insane? yes.
I don't think there's a word for it yet.
At times I had tears in my eyes.
That was such good writing.
I loved it so.

horsie890:

Shut up Loopy. I told you guys I think I killed it.

It works with the title of the song.

...

I quit.

Loopy, your reviews make me smile:mrgreen:

Way, I agree completely. But I don't want to change it.

But you didn't kill it!!! It was amazing, really.

Heh, maybe it's just that I like psycho stories <.<

lups:

The Way:

But I felt the end was too much, with the sudden suicides. You could have ended it with the end of the song, or just Gerard realizing that it was Frankie who did it. Or just more premonition of this tragic Frerard that slapped us right in the face... I'm just really in shock right now. More later.

LOL

Shut up Loopy. I told you guys I think I killed it.

It works with the title of the song.

...

I quit.

Loopy, your reviews make me smile:mrgreen:

Way, I agree completely. But I don't want to change it.

The Way:

But I felt the end was too much, with the sudden suicides. You could have ended it with the end of the song, or just Gerard realizing that it was Frankie who did it. Or just more premonition of this tragic Frerard that slapped us right in the face... I'm just really in shock right now. More later.

LOL

[He was conducting music. His music.
“…what are you gonna do?”]

I read that line and I thought: ''I know that song... I know I know that song...'' but I couldn't remember!

[“Oh, there’s been some shady guy hanging around my house recently,” Frank replied. “I’d rather not have him burst in here.”]

OOOO Evil Frank. It made me grin.

[“I hated seeing you such a wreck like that. Our lives completely fell apart, didn’t they? Especially you. You were broken, Gerard. You were…shattered.So I had to get rid of it. I got to see you. And that made it all worth it.”]

If it wasn't because of the whole situation, I'd actually think that that speech was kinda cute.

[“It was just- just nothing!” Gerard shouted. “Just a kid’s game! She was just a child, Frank! It didn’t mean anything!”
“And it still meant I got to see you again”]

Again, cuteness... Jesus Frank.

[“He was right. He always was too smart for his own good.”]

OMG I was right too!! Is Frank going to kill me??? :shock:

[He continued speaking as if nothing had happened, tending to Gerard like a mother, but speaking to him like a psychopath.]

ROTFL Go listen my profile song in Myspace... 'Frank's a psycopath all the time...'

[“Then…you just…die,” Frank whispered. It looked like he was trying to contain his excitement.]

And I couldn't contain my laughter.

[“The song…the song said ten years…but I only waited one…because I didn’t want you to leave.”]

Duh! Of course! 8 bitter years... 9 bitter years... 10 franking years....

[Frank joined in on the chorus, singing horribly off key]

PFFT Frank? Off key? You should have mistaken him for someone else LOL

[“Sometimes you scrape and sink so low, I’m shocked at what you’re capable of!” he sang, pointing an accusing finger at Frank. “And if this is a coronation, I ain’t feelin’ the love.” He began to step towards Frank, who automatically backed away. “‘Cause we are all a bunch of animals that never paid attention in school!” Gerard shouted. Before he could continue, though, Frank took over the situation.
“So tell me all about your problems; I was killing before killing was cool!” he yelled back with equal emotion.]

The singing battle was great.

[Frank suddenly began to snicker.
“You’ll never take me alive.”]

*bursts into laughter again* That was just priceless.

[A small puff of air escaped Frank’s parted, bloodstained lips, and his eyes went dull.]

:shock: *sings* ''Have you heard the news that you're dead?''

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OH. MY. GERARD.

I was shrieking in the middle of it.

And the Kill All Your Friends part...

WOW.

I was not expecting that.

Frankie... he.. he...

:shock:

YOU ARE EVIL.

But I felt the end was too much, with the sudden suicides. You could have ended it with the end of the song, or just Gerard realizing that it was Frankie who did it. Or just more premonition of this tragic Frerard that slapped us right in the face... I'm just really in shock right now. More later.

First reacion - I KNEW IT!!! I told you! GOD I even was right with the song!!!

Jesus Christ, I loved this more than anything. Evil Frank really makes my day every time I find a good one. I will make a more detailed review in a few minutes, I just wanted to tell you how happy I am that I discovered your secret and saw into your mind!!!!! :lol:

:shock: :shock: :cheese:
This update just made me react with tons of emotions...
it made me feel happy for Gerard,then it made me feel sick at the smell cause I could actually smell it I have no clue why and how though...
then it made hate Frank... then feel bad for Gerard..
then it made me do this :shock:
then I just went into shock again and died...
and now I'm alive again and I feel like this :cheese:

Awesome update
I loved it tons...
This isn't the end, is it?

Yeah, well, once you guys finish that twenty-mile-long chapter, comments would be great.

I can't help but feel like I killed it.

lups:

*sigh*

I love The Way's reviews...

:tehe:

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:grr:

I. Hate. You. You. Are. Evil.

For two reasons:

One: YOU KILLED OFF BOB!
Two: You're a fucking amazing writer.

BUT YOU KILLED BOB! And that made me cry...
You're stories always make me cry. Because you kill off, like, everyone and leave me speechless.

Alright, now back to being mad. :grr:

lups:

you shouldn't be here! you should be writting and letting me talking to myself!!!

*cries* Sorry Loopy...

you shouldn't be here! you should be writting and letting me talking to myself!!!

lups:

*sigh*

I love The Way's reviews...

Me too, Loopylupi. Me too. I think we all love her reviews. That and the ones from I will kill for her.

*sigh*

I love The Way's reviews...

Real review time:

I'm not too sure about how Bob left because Gerard drank again, but anyway...



And then they were pulling him away, his friends, the same people who had always helped him, protected him, saved him. But they were keeping him apart from another friend, and he wasn’t sure he could take it.

And he continued to scream as he was dragged out the door, wanting to know why the casket remained shut, why his blue-eyed friend would never see the light of day again, why he had ruined it all on his own, why no one had stopped him, why, why-

This was where I disregarded all possible plot holes because it was so, so beautifully written. It's so Echo-ish, yet it's not...

Why oh why would someone kill Bob? And why didn't they stop being friends? I'm getting goosebumps.


Two powerful, black-clad arms suddenly encircled him from behind. His heart leapt into his throat in a flash of fear, and the force of the impact threw him forward. He somehow managed to keep his footing. He almost struggled against whoever it was, but he quickly relaxed.

“Gerard, I-”

“You can’t leave,” Gerard said stubbornly, sobbing into the back of Frank’s shoulder. Frank gingerly removed Gerard’s arms from around his shoulders, but immediately turned around and embraced his friend.

“I know, Gee.”

Gerard didn’t bother correcting him.

:cry: Horsie, that was so cruel, yet I was glad for it. The sadness just poured from the words, and their gentle, broken friendship... and 'Gee...'

And now you killed Ray... WHY?

That memory was so sweet... the mental image of the Ways laughing because Ray's hair was 'poofier...'

But then... Gerard waited for Bob...


“Hey, Frank.” Gerard stepped forward and interrupted what he knew would soon be an awkward silence. Frank’s face lit up immediately.

“Hey, Gerard,” he said with dancing eyes, trying to keep his enthusiasm to a minimum. Gerard felt one corner of his mouth twinge upwards in an attempted smile. But it felt empty, for he was empty, and the small flutter of happiness dropped back into his heart like a lead weight.

Frerard friendship... :sigh:


“I missed you, Frankie,” Gerard said softly. His voice cracked when he said Frank’s name, and Gerard suddenly embraced him, and emotion was suddenly spilling from his sullen heart as though it had been locked there for years. He knew he was crying now, and that there was no way he could keep the hurt and the pain inside himself that way. He knew it would tear him apart.

Mikey stood off to the side, glancing down at the ground and allowing his eyes to travel over the stones. He shuffled one foot in the grass uneasily, watching tiny droplets of water spray up from his shoe and become lost in the rain. He was glad they got to see Frank again, but sometimes it made him a little jealous of their friend. Gerard hardly ever spoke to Mikey anymore; and yet, here he stood, spilling his heart out to Frank. Mikey just gave a sad little sigh and continued to stare at the ground. Two arms suddenly encircled him as well.

Why did you kill the BROTHERLY LOVE? WHY? That just killed me too. I think you know by now how much I live for that... :(

He couldn’t tell exactly what because his mind had become empty once again.

Wonderful, well-worded line.

DON'T TELL ME YOU'RE GONNA KILL ANOTHER ONE OF THEM IN THE NEXT UPDATE! PLEASE NO!

If I'm the queen of Waybrotherlylove, Fish Camp of Ryrard, Teh Sam of Bobard, Druscilla of slash in general, and a couple of people for Frerard...

You are now the queen of MCRtragedies.

(Btw, yeah, I recced Echo. That's how much I love it. And Gee's death was understandable, since he doesn't wear bulletproof vests on stage anymore... haha.)

Wonderful!
You really do enjoy killing your characters. x]
It's a sad story, but I love sad stories, so it's nice...in the twisted way that is my mind.
I hope you update soon, because I really like this story. =]

My favourite chapter yet! by far!

The memory of Leila and Ray made me smile. Like woah. More. More! MORE!

Am I being too demanding? 8D

OMG PEOPLE ARE GONNA KILL ALL OF THEM?!?!

Ouu.... wait.... OMG!!! XD

more soon???xoxo

-laughs- Now, that's good that you thought hard, and you're keeping your deep and powerful thoughts TO YOURSELF. waitingforsomething could learn from you. X D

Yeah, that line is funny...if you have a sick sense of humor.