July 23rd, 2009 at 07:04am
Cool! I'm the first comment. I like this. You should update soon. I like how Brendon knew her name, makes him all mysterious. Just make sure you don't use 'black/brown.' You could just say dark, or think up some elaborate color that fits your description. Since it's Brendon, I think you could just use Dark, or Brown, seeing as Brendon's hair isn't exactly black.
Brendon is always portrayed as the nicer vampire, isn't he?
Anyways, good start, sorry for getting all grammar crazy on you.
Oh and quick question...does Ryan have a 'partner' in this story? 'Cause I'm up for it. =P
You really shouldn't hold updates hostage for comments. It turns readers off. When readers see it, they'll often stop reading the story. Because really, what's the point of reading the story if it won't be updated just because of something like comments? It's pretty useless when you think about it.
I for one hate it and usually don't read stories where the author is holding updates hostage. :file:
Awesome story though.