My Immortal - Comments

I am really in love with this story! I really want to see how Rylynne and Brendons relationship grows! Update soon!

I'm really loving this so far ^^

:< That was so cute! He should play "Always" for her. Because that would be just adorable.

I loved the update! It was really intense! I can't wait to read more and find out what happens next! Update soon!

I really love the new chapter! I have this idea when Brendon takes her back to the mansion, he talks to her and tells her how he really feels for her, then he tricks her into letting him bite her and taste her blood, and she passes out and wakes up back in guys house, they notice the bite marks, and they watch her even more close and keep her from going to fight the Dandies, but she sneaks out anyway. I really love this story! Update soon!

i love this so fucking much!! write more please! c:

More more more pleas

Thank you for the new update! I can't wait to read the next chapter and see her fight! I hope Brendon is not too mad at her! Update soon!

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Okay, I didn't see your short summary of the story! Now my questions about it being from that music video is answered! hahaha

-from comment swap-
I don't usually read vamp stories, but this is great! Your idea is from the 'A Little Less Sixteen Candles...' music video, right? With Will Beckett, Brendon (obviosuly hahah) & FOB? Even if it's not, which I have a feeling it is, it's great! This is an awesome story & a great idea. Like others have said, your writing has gotten better & better with every single chapter. You've got grammar & spelling mistakes here and there, but other than that, you're gold. This is an awesome story :-)

Okay, so I was sent here via comment swap. I really like the idea of this story, I think it's very original. I can see how your writing has evovled since you started, I read the first chapter and was super overwhelmed because I didn't understand what was going on, the pace was moving so quickly. I would recommend maybe (and believe me, I know it's scary) going back and looking at your first chapters. I saw a few spelling/ grammar mistakes in the first few chapters, and the story kind of seems to go too quickly. I only say this because of comment swap, a lot of people are going to see your first chapters.

But your later chapters are great, and the pace is a lot better for me. It's getting very interesting, and again, I can see how much your writing has improved.
Keep up the good work and feel free to message if you have any questions. Hope you find this helpful! Good luck!

Update soon please! This really getting good! I can't wait to see what happens when she meets up with Brendon! Update soon!

update update update update update update update update please!!!!!!!!! this is an amazing story, pretty pretty please update? *gives puppy dog eyes.*

so glad you're updating again :)

Thank you so much for the update! I can't wait to see what happens next! That was really cool that Pete is actually trying to be nice to her! Update soon!

Update soon:)

I agree, bring it back! Hell, I've been waiting for this story to be updated for a whileeeeeeee

Bring it back! It is really getting good! I want to see if Brendon is going to find her! Update soon!