Where the Road Ends - Comments

I love that all of the characters aren't perfect, they all have their faults and it makes the whole thing seem so real, ya know? It makes me want to do something like this and get out of my town too. Maybe.

Your updates are so far apart. :(
Well, I guess it mades the chapters that much more amazing.
I love this so much. :)
Udate ASAP!

Beautiful. Lovely. Story.
I love the banner and the layout it's amazing. I love how you describe things and the way you write is amazing.

Pre-write contest review:

Layout:
The layout is very lovely. It's simple and nice and I love it. :D

Grammar & spelling:
I didn't see many mistakes, but in chapter two you said, He was a very dark skinned man, and he looked kind... I feel like you were kind of repeating yourself from earlier when you said: A dark skinned man looked up from the counter he was sitting behind and flashed us a smile. Doesn't really have much to do with grammar, but I thought I should add it in there. :D

Content:
The plot of the story had me interested from the beginning. I've always loved stories where they were travelling because more than one setting is really exciting to me. I also think that Cadee's character is very unique, and not some Plain Jane Mary Sue, you know? It's unbelievable how many stories on here have extremely promising plots, but I can't read it because the main character is so...plain. It's seriously heartbreaking, so this was a relief. The only critique I would have is to watch the words you put into your sentences, or how you phrase them. Sometimes you can remove words to make the sentence sound much more natural, and it really helps with the flow of your story. That's the only thing I have to say though, nice work! Good luck in the contest. :D

"Lucas Emerson," he said simply, shrugging with something that might have been disinterest, but I couldn't tell you for sure. He hastily added, "I just moved here from London."

That changed the tone of the conversation just a bit. Suddenly, I didn't want him out of the graveyard as soon as possible.

SOLD. Hahaha, that sounds just like me. This is really cute, though I admit I only read the first chapter so far. Subscribed!

Oh my Lanta, Georgia and New York City.
Thank God you are writing this again.
I love love love this and you have not updated in forever.
I am so glad your back!
Great update, I have been expecting them to crack eventually!
Can't wait for another!

i'm addicted! update!!!

I really like the way you started this story out. The way you write with such detail it's not too overbearing but it's got enough so I can see it perfectly in my mind. I really liked it a lot (:

Wow. I'm simply astounded. You've managed something that few have ever done: not only have I fallen in love with Cadee and Lucas (British - aw yeah), but I've fallen in love with everyone along the way. Those two little kids, Dewayne, Dex, that one waiter guy.

The tone of your story is excellent, and the plot is so real that I feel that this should be listed under True Story. The dialogue is perfect, spot on, and the description is just enough without being too little or too much.

The layout is perfect - that banner picture at the top is eye catching and well chosen.

Honestly, this is one of the most relatable stories I've read - I swear I've said some of Cadee's lines before, and I've felt just like her in so many of these scenes. It's like you took my life and put it here - but made it better, because there's a British guy named Mr. Lucas Handsome

Spectacular job - you most definitely have a new subby, as well as a loyal reader and probably an every new chapter commenter. You astound me, darling

I'm commenting under myself :O
BUT I just had to add that I am definitely subscribing :)

This story is absolutely adorably awesome :D
It's very well written and extremely relatable.
Keep it up!

I was instantly drawn to Cadee's character, usually I'm not a big fan of the main character and am usually drawn to side character but I think she is definitely my favourite so far. She's got that sort of inspiring fiery attitude that I really like, and her certain bluntness too. Usually I think it would be odd for someone to randomly go on a trip with a complete stranger, but I think it sort of works with her, I mean I could definitely see her character being incredibly impulsive like that.

Though it's a little odd that she's just going to... up and leave school without her parent's permission. Can someone even do that? Would they be pissed that she just sort of up and left her education? Like getting-her-home-now pissed, even if they pay attention to Tommy a lot I think that they'll notice their child disappeared. I think it would make better sense if she'd already finished high school, and took like a year off before college type-of-deal.

I feel bad for Lucas that this girl completely ditched him. I mean, she obviously meant a lot to him, but I think it really shows he's a super nice guy that he travelled all that way for her. I mean, like, super nice, wow. It's definitely an awesome adventure though that I think I'd like to go on one day, to going across the entire States. For now though, I shall vicariously live through them!

I'm still a little confused on why he was in the graveyard, though, aha. :D

The name tag informed me her name was Cindy, that she was the manager, and that she was delighted to serve me.
I grinned like an idiot when I saw that. That is clever, I like it!

I like the second chapter a lot, it's got that sort of light-heart comedy that I love, with the banter between them. Cadee definitely makes me smile with her comments, the Ten Commandments one too go me.

I like how they're buying something in every state, that's really cool. And the people in each one with their own interesting ways and personalities are really fun and refreshing to read.

I can even more understand her reasons for wanting to leave, with her brother being sick. Though I'm still sort of confused as to why her education isn't the biggest thing. Or well, at least big enough to mention. I mean, it's sort of her entire life. :/

I think it sucks though, that her parents are focusing so much on her brother and not on her. I think it really took a toll on her that they don't pay enough attention to her. I think it really sort of deepens the reason why she wants to go, and I really like that.

If he's nineteen, and in the States... how could he buy beer? Or was it a fake ID? Their drinking age is 21.

I really like the relationship too, that they're building. I can totally understand how she's getting jealous, and I was totally anticipating it and everything so it totally makes me so very happy and sad at the same time. I don't know what to think of Evelyn, at this point when Cadee is saying is true- she made this guy come across an ocean for her and she hangs up on him? Not cool.

Overall, I really do like this story. The only thing that bugs me is the whole school thing, because education is really important, at least finishing high school and I don't think any good parent would allow their kid to just up and leave and not finish. I know her parents don't pay much attention to her, but I don't think they'd allow something like that. Otherwise, it has a lot of heart and I really like it.

:D

I really like this so far! Both the characters have different backgrounds and motives, which really makes them seem incredibly real. I find it really sweet that Lucas is going all around the country to find this girl... but he totally has chemistry with Cadee. The way you described her "boring" town was amazing, because I can relate. Hurrah for small towns? Not really. =P

The layout is also very beautiful. It's simple, yet gorgeous. It doesn't distract from the text, which is always a good thing! I will be subscribing. =D

First of all, this story has such a cute little plot to it. I love the humor between the characters because it seems like something right off the big screen - funny and real, and just overall youthful. So kudos to you there, you've captured what a ton of writers fail at. I read your chapters that you wrote seeing as this is YOUR comment swap, Unpretty, and what I didn't like about the last chapter was the ending. It seems so dramatic - a bit too girlish. Like, she just flops down like the world's coming to an end. I know she's so upset because Lucas is looking for that girl and obviously Cadee likes HIM, but really? She flopped. FLOPPED. I would say something like she sank down onto the bed wordlessly...or something less oh-my-god-the-love-of-my-life-doesn't-want-me-after-all, you know?

I love the plot of this. I love your writing especially. Like I said before, it's extremely realistic and easy to relate to.

This. Is. So. Freaking. Cute.

I love it. They seem to fit so well together. Everything seems so natural with them.

This is very well written. It flows nicely. I noticed close to no errors. It's great so far. It's one of the best original fictions that I've read on this site. The chapters are a great length.

The chapter with the kids made me laugh so much. And the one in the diner was cute. I love how he just blurted out that she wanted the waiter to flirt with her.

I'm definitely subscribing to this. I can't wait to see what happens. I can't even describe how much I loved reading this.

first off, just the layout's picture makes me read it, i really like the story line; and well written too!

"I'm never gonna fall in love. It's just a trick. Girls pretend to love you but then they just make you do stuff for 'em. That's what my dad says." <--- I adore that.

This is one of the cutest stories I've read on this site ^.^

There is gome grammer errors, but it wasn't enough to distract me. :)

Aw, this is so cute and such a good idea.
I like how it's not just a boring romance but they travel around and I love how for each chapter, they're somewhere different.
It's well written and super good!

This was really, really good:)
Both of you are wonderful writers, and your writing styles compliment each other well.
I subscribing:)

How cliche.

I love it.