Did You Get What You Deserve? - Comments

commenttingg.

I think James leaving should be sadder.
if you do a last chapter with him, i want to be crying, okies?

good.
goodbye.

Do I have to comment properly? Cause I'm just..........awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!

Comments? Like this?

I liked it. Your writing genuinely is improving. No cringe-worthy dialogue!

Awww... *wibbles*
Not too overdone with Lloyd's confession either.

OHMIGOD I LEARNT HOW TO SAVE PEOPLE AT SWIMMNG.
You have to drag them by either the chin, or around the chest. :)

OH SHIT SHIT SHIT SHIT DID I MISS YOUR BIRTHDAY?
AAAH I'M SORRY IF I DID.
HAPPY BIRTHDAY LOVELY. (:

Aaaaah yay meee! i was laughing so hard when i read it ;)

Heee, cuteness. Although I do feel sorry for Cari... jet lag AND a four-or however long it took recording session.

That chapter was love, glorious, glorious love. I really felt it too, really sweet and beautiful.

CARI CAN COME BACK!

I've always wanted to play drums :)

(I thought that was quite a good idea. :))

Chapter 70: Ticket to Ride or Why You Should Never Have MSN Conversations With Someone Looking Over Your Shoulder Who Knows The Other Person

Also, I see the real-life (kind of) as well.

Drum machine, duh. They don't empty your fridge or steal your girlfriend. Or alternatively, a session musician.

I love being able to spot the little bits that are going on in your life that you put in the story =D

James is a pervert.

Strangely, that cafe scene was AWESOME.
I almost want to draw fanservicey anime style fanart with Alec fishing the coins out. *grins broadly*

*fangirls you for making Lachlan mention how truly ancient the laptop is*
Dementia/deludedness is not a funny thing, but still, it's somewhat amusing to see the utter confusion arising. And it's so fun to see the little 'game'. :D
*huggles you better*

Yes, yes I did.

Deluded people, lulz.

I like Alec.

I dunno... Alec does seem playful and he has been given the right motivation to be suggestive... and the fact that he is (obviously) loyal to those who've done something for him suggests that the entire sequence WASN'T unbelievable.

You've also been writing him for ages now. Trust yourself.

I refuse to support your addiction! =P

Family reunions are even more love than comments. Gosh you make all the kids so cute!
I would say the dialogue was a bit...meh. Sort of agreeing that it was built-up in an over-dramatic fashion, and then a bit of what they were saying just didn't flow or seem 'right'.