Ohmigod, they're adorable. Family dinners, ftw. I like Andrew, and May's okay. Alex is being pissy. And Jack's too cute for words. Carolyn is awesome. XD She reminds me a bit of my mum, actually.
Alex needs to make up his mind. Does he want Jack or not (he does, hopefully). If so, he needs to go after him. I hope you update before Christmas, this is awesome!
I don't normally read chaptered fanfic, but this is just adorable. And I had no idea Alex was from England until now.
It's really sad, and really emotional at times, but I love the little laugh-out-loud bits just thrown in there for comic relief. I like the way you write. :)
=D Awww this story is so cute! And Alex is being a lil bitch. He shouldn't be with May. Jack has every right to be mad, even if he didn't like Alex. Update soon!
Hey! In reply to your post in request for con-crit on this piece:
In the 8th paragraph, there is an error with the quotation marks. Check up on that.
Also, I would really like some sort of description of the boys and the one boy's sister. Nothing too revealing, but maybe just a hair color or a distinctive trait of the three.
In the 18th paragraph, there is another punctuation error (a missing period).
I think it was really, really heartwarming other than that. (: It would honestly be such a beautiful beginning if Jack and Alex and May grew up to be friends in highschool or something. Very good start! I've subscribed and am looking forward to more.
I like Andrew, and May's okay. Alex is being pissy. And Jack's too cute for words.
Carolyn is awesome. XD She reminds me a bit of my mum, actually.
It's so cute. I think you've got me hooked.