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  • Its_RobynXo

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    love this story so far!
    ha...I can't believe she yawned...that would have been the furthest thing from my mind!
    cant wait for more!!
    December 22nd, 2009 at 11:27pm
  • xVampyraxHavocx

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    *giggles* She yawned during foreplay with Brian. Is that even possible? Would anyone do that to the ever so sexy Brian Haner Jr.? XD I like this story so far. Good job hon. :]
    December 16th, 2009 at 10:41am
  • Never the Miracle

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    luv this story....cant wait for an update...its been soo long but ill wait <3
    December 16th, 2009 at 12:59am
  • the fallen.

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    Avenged Sevenfold AND Criminal Minds?

    A dream come true <3
    I love the whole concept and the plot. For the first chapter, it was very long and detailed.
    I love it!
    Please, more!
    December 14th, 2009 at 01:25am
  • fastmelodic

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    OMFG!!!

    Love the summary, hun! <3
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    Watched, Tortured, Fallen
    <33
    W. T. F.
    Waking. The. Fallen.

    I dunno why, but I wanted to write that. Shut up. :P
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    10:52
    HOLY SHIT!
    It's 1:52 here--wait, never mind, now it's 1:53. >.<
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    “So, are you coming home with me tonight?” his velvety voice murmurs into my ear, his hot breath dancing across my neck.
    -goosebumps all across Ali's body-
    Is it who I think it is?
    Is it...is it...GAH, IS IT MY BABY?!

    :D

    <333333333333333333
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    “Maybe,” I reply
    HAHAHAHA!
    I asked that question, so it's a maybe. Hmm...
    -continues reading-
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    “Rylee, babe, take a break,” he pleads as he places a few soft kisses down my neck and slowly breaking down my willpower.
    YUSH!!!
    Take a damn break, baby, let Bri-Man© fuck you. :)

    Nickname is Copyrighted.
    XD
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    “You know you love me,”
    That I do, Bri. :)
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    “Only because you’re so damn cute,”
    AHHHHHHHHH!!
    Not the only reason!!! If I had to list it'd be WAAAYYYYYYYYYYY too long.
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    All of the children had been female, all of them had blonde hair and green eyes, all were between the ages of ten and twelve, and all of them had been raped prior to their deaths.
    I'm sensing some wierd shit, already.
    Hmm...
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    It was actually one of the school’s counselors that did it all; he was able to gain their trust when they came to him for help with problems ranging from recent divorce in the family to a fight with their best friend.
    OMFG!! I actually LIKE my school’s counselors-well one of them--she's ridicoulously nice!
    Thanks, Angie, just--just thanks!
    -bawls-

    All better. :)
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    “Really,” I smile.
    She should've been like Really, Really. XD
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    He flashes that perfect smile of his and my heart melts.
    Mines no longer solid.
    <33
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    warm chocolate brown eyes, a prefect nose, beautiful cheekbones, a stunning smile, and lips
    I KNOW IT'S HIM, NOW!!!
    AHHHHH!!
    <333333333
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    I’m seriously the luckiest girl in the world right now
    YES, you are!
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    smirks
    I love that smirk; it's a sexy smirk.
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    “Ry,” he breathes softly and I look up to see his chocolate eyes filled with desire.
    -sits on the edge of her seat-
    Ihopethere'ssex;please,God,lettherebesex!!!
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    He carefully lays me down onto the mattress and breaks the kiss for a moment. He gazes down at me lovingly, gently tucking my hair behind my ear before he attaches his lips to mine once more in a soft, sweet kiss. He lightly pecks my lips a couple of times and lets his mouth travel from my lips to my jaw line, placing several soft kisses along an invisible path to my ear. I bite my bottom lip, giggling as he nips at my earlobe. He releases a low, seductive growl into my ear, his hot breath dancing across my skin, and I groan softly as I slightly tilt my head back.

    I gasp as the tip of his tongue glides across my neck and he attacks my neck, tenderly kissing, nipping, and licking the sensitive flesh. I arch my back, pushing my chest up towards him, and moan loudly as his assault on my neck continues, making its way down to my chest. I run my hands over his back, moving down to his ass. He lightly bites my collarbone, catching me off guard and releasing another moan into the room. His lips brush against my warm skin, kissing down to the valley between my breasts. I arch my back, pushing myself up to his lips, craving more of his touch.

    I open my eyes, looking down at him through heavy lidded eyes, and watch him as he pushes aside the silky fabric of my bra from my left breast. His eyes flicker up to mine for a moment and he smirks at me as he lowers his lips to the hard nipple. I gasp shakily as his tongue flicks over the hardened bud, and my eyes fall shut once more.

    “Oh…Oh, God, Bri--” I moan.

    Well, at least it started as a moan…

    I yawn the rest of his name, and he suddenly stops, chuckling at me. My eyes flutter open once more and I feel my cheeks heat up with embarrassment. I can’t believe I really did that. I can’t believe I just yawned in the middle of foreplay. How stupid can I be?

    “Am I boring you, Rylee, my dear?” he asks with a teasing smile.

    “Of course not, Bri. I’m sorry, I didn’t--”

    He shushes me, placing a loving kiss on my lips. “Don’t apologize, baby. You’ve had a long day and we’re both a little jetlagged from that flight,” he whispers.

    “But I ruined the moment,” I pout.

    “Aw, baby, you didn’t ruin anything,” he assures me with a small smile as he smoothes my hair down with his hand.

    “Really?”

    “Really,” he murmurs, leaning in and kissing me. His lips brush up against mine so lightly that my heart flutters in my chest and I can’t help but smile into the kiss. “How about we just cuddle and catch up on our sleep?”

    “You really wanna cuddle with me?” I query, trailing my index finger down his smooth chest.

    “I wouldn’t have suggested it if I didn’t, silly,” he chortles, rubbing the tip of his nose against mine and eliciting a laugh from me.

    I push myself up enough to kiss his soft lips. I beam at him as I rest my forehead against his, running my fingers through his short dark locks. He gazes warmly into my eyes, kisses my cheek, and lies down beside me on the bed. I turn onto my side and snuggle into his chest; I kiss his skin a couple of times as he wraps his arms around me, hugging me close to his body, and my eyes begin to grow heavy once more.

    “I love you, Rylee,” he murmurs, kissing the top of my head as he rubs small circles on my lower back.

    “I love you, too, Brian,” I whisper sleepily, nuzzling into his chest, letting his steady heartbeat lull me to sleep. “I love you, too.”
    URK!
    That was sexy!

    OOOOOOOHHHH!
    And I was right!
    Proof One:
    “Oh…Oh, God, Bri--”
    Proof Two:
    “Of course not, Bri. I’m sorry, I didn’t--”
    Proof Three:
    “I love you, too, Brian,”
    YAY! -happy dance-

    AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!

    I love it, Angie!

    MORE! MORE! MORE!

    Ok, I'm done. XD
    December 2nd, 2009 at 11:08pm
  • moviemaniac888

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    I am really liking this new story and the setting being in the FBI field. Brian and Rylee are adorable together. I'm excited to see what you do with it. :D
    November 29th, 2009 at 07:27am
  • Never the Miracle

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    omg this is sooo good cant wait for an update.....and i luv tht you used Criminal Minds as a reference I luv tht show!!!!

    keep going!!!!
    November 28th, 2009 at 05:15pm
  • Morning.Love

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    I love the story so far! :)
    It's something really different and I can't wait to read the rest!!
    November 26th, 2009 at 04:40pm
  • Talk To Mushrooms.

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    love it already
    November 23rd, 2009 at 05:17am
  • Derpina.

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    Rylee is a cutie. I'm attached already. I can't wait to see more action! With the FBI of course... But maybe some Bri action as well hehe.
    November 23rd, 2009 at 04:45am
  • Music...and...Poetry

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    That was supposed to be I can't wait for more! >.<
    November 23rd, 2009 at 12:04am
  • Music...and...Poetry

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    That was so awesome!
    Sorry it took so long for me to read it today!or more!
    I loved it!
    It was so adorable! =D
    I can't wait f
    November 23rd, 2009 at 12:04am
  • Kismet

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    I loved this, but you already knew that! Haha. Brian's so sweet in this; it's just adorable. Rylee and Brian seem like they fit well together, in my opinion. And he's all cuddly in this! Hehe. I'm excited to see them at work, and meet the rest of the team. Can't wait 'til ya update!
    November 22nd, 2009 at 10:00pm
  • evencrayonslaughatme

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    Totally loving this babes!!!!
    Can't wait for more!!!!!
    November 22nd, 2009 at 06:16pm
  • dinugget

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    Aww, Brian is so cute:)
    Seriously, their freaking adorable!
    I love this story already:D
    November 22nd, 2009 at 01:19pm
  • SillyFrench

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    I'm so glad you told me that you posted the first chapter =]
    I liked it, and I'm totally curious to read more about it!
    look forward to more! :)
    November 22nd, 2009 at 12:16pm
  • fictionkitten

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    I am so excited for this!
    November 22nd, 2009 at 11:00am