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  • Bells.

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    Wow, this was so different from anything I have ever read! I like the way you used second person and present tense. It just makes it all the more unique. I spotted one mistake in the first chapter (I think), but it wasn't anything major - you just used a word twice, most likely by accident, because it did not make sense. It was a short word like 'it' or something. Sorry, I'd tell you more about it, but I'm tired and all - it's 1 am.

    I loved this bit: "Adie holding as many make-up brushes as there were people dying from anorexia". I like the way you used such a normal action to portray what the story was about.

    I also liked the way that Adie was only using Holly to get into the paper. It made Holly feel that much more human.

    I'm sorry, I would give more constructive feedback, but... -looks at time-

    I subscribed and I look forward to reading more when you are ready to post.
    April 30th, 2008 at 02:58pm
  • Holly.

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    Oh My Gosh- I'm crying... I cannot believe it, but I am.

    Thanks so much for writing this... I really can't explain how much it has helped me... it's sort of made me think about what a fucking idiot I've been. And I'm also sort of worried the whole thing about you in it is true...? I feel quite bad about not being on xanga for ages now... Write back,
    Holly
    xx
    April 19th, 2008 at 08:20pm
  • Non_Cherie

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    SQUEE FOR UPDATES!
    (squee is my new word for yay)
    April 7th, 2008 at 11:12pm
  • Telenovela!

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    yays, you updataed again!
    but she dieddd D=

    susie x
    April 6th, 2008 at 06:52pm
  • poetic tragedy

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    I've read the first chapter, and love it so far.
    I really need to catch up on this :]
    April 5th, 2008 at 09:38pm
  • Siriano;

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    People told me this was awesome, so I'll read it later when I have time.
    March 24th, 2008 at 10:12pm
  • I C G P

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    I love this. [:
    More soon please.
    March 22nd, 2008 at 04:30pm
  • Where's Adalia?

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    Oh wow.
    Poor Debbie.
    This is crazy-good.
    Amazing job. Amazing update. Amazing story.
    March 1st, 2008 at 12:21am
  • Non_Cherie

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    roo?
    the last chapter confused the fuck outta me,
    but i must say, i love how you've written this.
    *high five*

    and thanks for putting the model version of me in here, even if Model-Adie is a snob, but all models learn to be so...
    anyways.
    MY BRAIN HAS GONE INTO A POETIC BACKFIRE.

    because of one damn sentence.

    Being perfect means nothing if you hate who you are.
    February 17th, 2008 at 12:58am
  • Bass_Face_SUPERHERO

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    I read all of it. the sorta was about the just.
    Because I've on and off been at it.
    February 16th, 2008 at 06:51pm
  • Bass_Face_SUPERHERO

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    I just read it. Well sorta. Been out cold and sore headed lately.
    Oh naw :O
    I think I can guess what happens next ^__^
    Aweseme
    Cheer up hen :D

    Pure awesome.
    WEll I'm off to sleep.
    Look after that amazing talent of yours.

    xxoo
    February 16th, 2008 at 06:50pm
  • Telenovela!

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    wow, this is amazing.
    it's so vivid and imaginable, and beautifully written too.

    you can't make debbie die though. that's too sad!

    more soon?

    *subscribes*

    susie x
    February 13th, 2008 at 02:48pm
  • Where's Adalia?

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    That's very strange. But somehow perfect..
    You really do have a way with words. The fact that she felt loved by the person she only knew for a few seconds, everything just fits into place.
    And then the ending, about Debbie...just wow. That's all I can say; you've left me at a loss for words. It's beautiful, the way you write.
    You are an incredible writer.
    Amazing.
    More when you can.
    February 12th, 2008 at 12:14am
  • Bass_Face_SUPERHERO

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    mental
    I'm shocked and rather confused.
    It just went down teh plug hole like that? But then where's the dude? and why didn't i take it off earlier?
    ANd I hugged her and brgouth ehr back to my hosue?
    Really?
    WHoah.
    But like why only one photo? and, and and Why is she in my house?
    WHoochchhchcahahah

    xo
    February 10th, 2008 at 06:12pm
  • Bass_Face_SUPERHERO

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    Where's Adalia?:
    Who was it...?
    Great job.
    This is really amazing.
    I love the titles of the chapters as well.
    The way you're writing this is simply superb..
    Amazing.
    The chick in the loo is me ^__^

    NYLA!
    February 10th, 2008 at 01:46pm
  • Where's Adalia?

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    Who was it...?
    Great job.
    This is really amazing.
    I love the titles of the chapters as well.
    The way you're writing this is simply superb..
    Amazing.
    February 9th, 2008 at 09:51pm
  • Bass_Face_SUPERHERO

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    It's 10 to 3 in the morning.
    I've just read this again.
    I wanna sleep but I can't
    Meow
    UPDATE
    OR I'M CALLING YOU
    RIGHT NOW
    **twitch**

    xxoo
    February 9th, 2008 at 03:50am
  • Bass_Face_SUPERHERO

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    I know you probably haven't seen the last comment but I'm saying it again.
    Wow. I feel all honoured to be in this ^__^
    You have to update soon! Atleast before I end up in London. Ye see, this is gunna drive me mentals.
    I've read it like 4 times.
    IS the Frick from me or Holly? I thought it was from me because of teh general me-ness of the word and because of the hangover.
    I have that picture. I was wondering street maybe? Pure re-reading. I can't believe i have a ring on :| Like wow. Is this an arranged marrige? Pfft. OKay, i refuse toupdate DBA until thin is updated.
    I'll work on Prozac instead [:

    xxxxxoooo
    MORE CHAPTER
    February 9th, 2008 at 12:48am
  • Bass_Face_SUPERHERO

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    DEBBIE!
    DEBBIE!
    DEBBIE!
    I'M MARRIED? :o
    HOLY SHIT
    UPDATE MORE OR I KILL YOU **twitches**
    Just got back from my grans. OMFG wow.
    I can't believe like I'm in this :D
    The update was awesome. The tecnique is so subtle but yet punchy and in your face. Meow. OMG OMG OMG MORE CHAPTER!

    xxxooo
    February 8th, 2008 at 11:08pm
  • Bass_Face_SUPERHERO

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    OMFG
    OMFG
    OMFG
    I AM? I AM? I AM?
    Pure addicted the now ^__^
    Updates sooooon! xD
    Is the rivalry gunna happen? ye know because i think it will
    Omg omg omg
    YAYS ;D
    February 6th, 2008 at 10:22pm
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