I just finished reading the first chapter (: The idea is great especially for a first chapter cause you're forced to go an reading :D I laughed a lot about what Oli said I think he's a very cute criminal! Well... But I missed her feelings when the guys came in to attack her; maybe you should have mentioned her fear, her panic or whatever she thinks in this situation.
update soon please.:D
I totally love the way you describe the characters,
they actually feel like real people.