I'm a little sad that I'm all caught up now. I'm really enjoying this story. Trust me, I am. So, a couple of thing: Makena is a B word, but you probably already knew that. Haha. I think that it was so brave of Kara for filing the report and everything. Eveything time you talk about Nick crying, it makes me so sad. You just explain it so well. I really hate some of their fans. They shouldn't jump to conclusions like that and automatically assume that her being pregnant is her fault and that she did it on purpose and eveything. But the sad part is that that's what people would do in real life as well. the good part with that is that it means that your story is realistic. I still agree with everything I said in my last review. I love this story so much! The only piece of advise I could think of to give you would to put magazines articles and interviews and things like that in italics. But I think that's about it. I really love this, and since I can say this this time, I can not wait to read more!
That was a well written chapter. I loved the psycho chick though. I'd probably be like that no matter how hard I would try to stay calm. Sometimes u just have to be crazy.
Okay, I just finished reading chapter 10, but I wanted to leave a quick comment to tell you what I think of this so far.
I honestly think that if I hadn't started to read this, it wouldn't have been one of the biggest mistakes EVER!I am loving this so much right now. It's one of the only fanfics that I don't want to stop reading, if it were a book I wouldn't want to put it down.
Nick is so sweet. His whole family is. And the thing that I like the most about that is that it's believable. All the feelings and emotions and sctions are all believable and I can really see all of this happening. The way you decribe things are awesome and readable and . . . not annoying? Haha. I don't really know how to describe it. You explain things just enough, you know? You don't have just one-line describtions for everything, but you don't go on for paragraphs on end about one person or one room or one kiss or anything like that. I think that this story and Kara would be so easy to make into a marysue, but you didn't. You made Kara believable. I feel that readers can really relate to her. She's likable, and doesn't make people want to mock or yell at her or anything.
So, basically, in case you couldn't tell, I am really enjoying your story.
I think it's the cop, and he's just trying to cover for himself. Nobody would suspect him, and of course he would have a gun. And it would explain why he wasn't very nice, and his daughter hates her. It's like the ultimate logic puzzle.
I was reading it and i was like!!!!! THAT'S A NICK J SONG... and the moment i thought that, it came on... I downloaded the whole thing, and it wsn't leaked, it's out in Mexico..
Go to nickjonasandtheadministrationmn.blogspot.com ..... that's where it's at... but i pre-ordered the album so that i have officialy bought it.. It's amazing...
I love it all.. So, i like this story, and I loved this update intensely so don't worry about lack of interest from me.
Hmmmm... an idea, I'm clueless really.... I'm having writers block, but the moment i think of something cool for your story I'll comment it..
I was reading it and i was like!!!!! THAT'S A NICK J SONG... and the moment i thought that, it came on... I downloaded the whole thing, and it wsn't leaked, it's out in Mexico..
Go to nickjonasandtheadministrationmn.blogspot.com ..... that's where it's at... but i pre-ordered the album so that i have officialy bought it.. It's amazing...
I love it all.. So, i like this story, and I loved this update intensely so don't worry about lack of interest from me.
Hmmmm... an idea, I'm clueless really.... I'm having writers block, but the moment i think of something cool for your story I'll comment it..