Shattering Crystals - Comments

I'm too tired for super detail....

I like how you kind of make it a bit of a puzzle and add good details and emotions.

There. I am now done. (:

Okay... here is my detailed comment:

I like how you describe how Dana/Diana is feeling in each chapter, because it sort of/kind of helps me connect more with the story and I like how you always have little bits of humor (:

Are you happy NOW? :P Love ya <3

I COMMENTED. Are you happy now? :P haha I love it... still... ;D

ah! i really likme it but you should check your punctuation because i saw somw places you forgot spaces, other than that its great =) keep writing, plz!

I love your story. Please write more.

p.s- ILY!!! and your an awesome author!

i love this story!! keep posting

Still loving it Danaaa :)<3 And yes...he does sounds like Noah!!! ;D hahaha

Luvsyuh Dana<3:)Andd Another 2 Chapters<3:)

Diana write moree chapters!<3 i luvs it<3

I like it so far, perhaps the descriptions could be put into a paragraph instead of spaced out phrases all the time, but that is the only thing I noted that could be fixed. Your spelling and grammar for the most part are all really good.

Another thing, the storyline is really good, unique anyway. Keep updating, I am going to subscribe to this, also feel free to read my story, Brotherly Secrets.

Proofread four, I see mistakes. Also say who said the quote at the top. Otherwise great.

Three is good but needs more details. You need to stop like cutting everything off with the stars.

Oh my, me and my friends always say fairy princess. I like how it is going to be a like quest, since they have to figure out who is from the place.

I'm glad you don't just jump into the plot. I also like how you welly give the girl her own personally. Lastly, I like your transition. It makes us want to read more. I am off to read chapter two.

OMG!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!