Shattering Crystals - Comments

you know my thoughts on this matter. ajustsaying.

My favorite character would have to be Dana xD and I really like Conner too. I hope they are together. Aha. Great update! I love big mansion settings with a group of friends and drama. It's always so lovely to read<3

I like the layout, it was plain and simple but it is nice and easy on the eyes and the colour scheme works perfectly. <3 I really liked the summary, you went into depth and gives the reader some sort of vague, hazy idea of what is going on, without actually giving us all the big details and leaving us intrigued!

I like the little quote thingo in italics at the start of the chapter, it was a nice touch and it just shows her desire for perfection. I'm normally not a fan of present tense but you manage to make it work, and I like your descriptions! Your sentences flow with ease and ooh, I like how you ended the chapter. It's cliff-hangerish and definitely makes the reader want more! Good job <33

I just read the first chapter because I'm at work and technically shouldn't even be on here, but hey!

The layout was nice, nothing too bright and flashy but it was still pretty to look at. I wasn't the biggest fan of the banner, but it was still nice.

I thought the first chapter was a good read. I do think therw could have been a few more descriptions in different places to make it seem more...real I guess, but it wasn't too bad.

Fanatsyish stories aren't really my life, but this plot seems cool so I'm most likely going to be reading more. And then first chapter was rather cliffhangerish, so I feel like I need to read it. xD

But good job! (:

You're banner is like, really pretty. As for the story in itself, definitely not something I would have picked up to read myself, but was not dull by any means. I actually really enjoyed it.

I typically don't like when some writers write in first person because one, it's often very difficult to do and two, limits a lot of description-and that's like my favorite thing in life. I mean you could sit me in a room and I could come up with like ten ways to tell you what a blank piece of paper looks like. (/exaggerated)

The only error I really found was in chapter one after the second break, I think, was that you had a typo. You added a 't' at the end of what you meant to be 'though'. Otherwise, good job. My only suggestion would be to add some vivid description where you can.

Good work. :)

You are too sweet for whiting out my story :3 thanks so much.

Lorraine is a seducer? Aaron's uncle is coming? Aaron's ex committed suicide? What happens next???

I love all the little group drama and relationships in here while the bigger plot of running is still going on :) it's like an amazing tv shoe or something. I haven't read something this amazingly addictive story in a long time. Seriously. I love this. I do hope you update soon. :))

Wow. Okay, I know Dana broke the "sister code" but if I were Lorraine, I wouldn't be cold and jealous enough to ask my friend to break up with anyone. Even if I love them.

Great chapter, your Cliffies make me want to continue. Which I am doing right now haha.

No. Dana wants Aaron because he sounds cool. Yes. They better be together xD

Great 32nd chapter :) I hope Lorraine comes around though. She is soundif a but over dramatic.

I'll definitely be reading more of this, but I wanted to get the comment out of the way.

The layout is well done, the banner I especially like. It's very pretty, and blissfully legible.

The actual story content is really enjoyable. A lot of times I find myself skipping over certain passages that I feel are really long or unimportant. Dana's really relatable, especially for me, which makes her such a compelling character. We all worry about covering up our zits, getting whiter teeth, not looking so plain. The voice is well done, and the last part of the chapter had me dying for more, so I'll go read it now. Thank you for writing this, darling. It's lovely.

y'all are jealous.

i'm her love.

you made things terrible on christmas.

dude and you're leaving.

whywhywhywhy.

*subscribes

LORRAINE IS SO NEEDY. OH MY GOD.

Conner and Dana?? Oooo

Cody and Dana kissing??? WTF!! This is going to be one epic twist in the story. I can't wait to see who finds out about their lip to lip action and what they'll do bout it. Amazing chapter <3

" That’s awesome. Oh, and Ashlee? Did you know that there are unicorns living on Earth? You just can't see them. No one can at all, not even themselves."

"Really? That's so cool!"

Just gullible.

That part was so effing funny. I peed my pants ;)) great chapter. Going back to read more :D

I'm so glad I came back to this<3 I was heartbroken the way Elise left Becca. Why wouldn't Becca go with and search for a new and better life?!??!!!? That makes me mad. Also, I love how you continue to put good detail in your stories and you never slack off. :)

How do you come up with and write such amazing masterpieces?

I'm going back to read more :)

I love this story and the concept of this. It really is unique and elegant and just everything i like put into one story.
I love the layout specially the colors and the banner, it all goes well with eachother.
Keep updating becuase I will keep reading.
I love the names for every chapter that's also unique.

I've only read two chapters so far, because I'm going to continue on to tomorrow, but I really liked it so far. I like your characters and I'll read more to see how things turn out. <3

C0dy st0p macking on C0nnor's girl.

that is all.

GREAT SC0TT!

THERE IS N0THING C00LER THAN BEANS.

H0W DARE Y0U MAKE SUCH AN ASSUMPTI0N!

l0ve the update, by the way.