December 16th, 2010 at 08:07pm
Shattering Crystals - Comments
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3. About Teena, they just might kidnap her too?December 16th, 2010 at 02:31am
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1. Nope.
2. I don't really know...
3. What's the third question? Lol.
A few typos. Was to lazy to msn you.December 16th, 2010 at 02:30am -
1. Flipp a tit?
2. Not really.
3. WHAT THE BUM?
2typos at end, find them?
though -> thought
and i forget other one.
10:29!December 15th, 2010 at 04:29am -
I would hate if it were all a dream, I actually didn't think twice when I read he was rooming with the girls haha, and I had a feeling that someone in the story would be in lorraines situation.December 14th, 2010 at 06:41pm
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1. If it was a dream, i'd flip out. That's not cool.
2. Cause Dean's awesome. or to be with Ashlee/Dana. Idk.
3. It's her own fault.
update. !December 13th, 2010 at 10:51pm -
Sorry it was a very short essay ^^December 11th, 2010 at 12:29am
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YAY. I be finally commenting(: Sorry it took so long... my family hath been trying to keepeth me from Mibba *tear* ANYWAY. I'm going to write another essay. Just. For. You.
SO. I liked that you had Teena (AMAZING name) remember names and stuff, because I like the fact that your starting to introduce people from the next story(: (By the way, Lacey's name is the best<3) I didn't like that it was extremely short though... you could have added MORE DETAILS (I know, surprising, right?) Like, what was the tree house like? How did they get there? Did they go through the house? What was the house like? Could you show the emotions of the group and individuals? Facial expressions? The state of everyone (dirty, tired, etc.)?
Dwell on this. And update. <3December 11th, 2010 at 12:29am -
I vote noDecember 10th, 2010 at 12:49am
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I vote noDecember 10th, 2010 at 12:49am
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I like how Teena isn't like the other characters.December 8th, 2010 at 02:32am
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Chapter 58 - No typos
Chapter 59 - PACKED FULL<3
That's oki though, AND YES BONUS CHAPTER<3December 7th, 2010 at 03:22am -
I thought this chapter was good. I like Teena, but she seems like a know it all. :p haha I wann know why she can't go with them! >.< but yes to the bonus chapter, of course!December 6th, 2010 at 05:24am
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I thought they would have to give up on KatalinaDecember 3rd, 2010 at 12:10am
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OHMYHOLYBEJESUSIWASYOURHUNDREDTHCOMMENT. I bumped you up a star :) hehe
So yeah. I'm awesome.December 2nd, 2010 at 10:21pm -
OH! And I'm changing my mind...I now like ELISE and dislike LORRAINE.
Because Lorraine's a selfish bitch. And Elise is amazing. Just thought you should know.December 2nd, 2010 at 10:19pm -
Thank you soooooo much dahlin for the lovely birthday wish :) I will remember it always<3 hehe :P
ANYWAY. Essay time. (I do owe you ;D) Ok. So, honestly, I think Katalina went along with them a little too easy for my taste. Even though she's self-centered and b****y and whatever, I still think she should put up a bit more of a fight, you know? And I think you could have added more details that lead up to their trip to Singapore and why they're going. (do they sense someone new? intuition? marigold? etc etc) I didn't see many mistakes, (YAY), but you've caught my ellipsis-ititis a bit :P haha but I don't care because I looooove ellipses :) <3
What I liked about the chapter was how you planned out everything they did, but I think you could have gone into more detail with it (AGAIN! haha always detail.) You could even do it in present tense, like showing them AS they plan as oppose to where they are because of the planning. Overall, I think it just comes down to more detail :P haha and you know me and detail...we're lovers. ;) *oh baby* OH! And I liked the ending with the girl at the door... very mysterious. *spooky music*
And there is my essay to you <3 I love ya Dana(:
JK. Your fat rolls are blocking my love.December 2nd, 2010 at 10:16pm -
Wooo, only a couple more chapterss<3December 1st, 2010 at 11:18pm
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I agree with Ash;
i like kidnapping :]
more?November 29th, 2010 at 11:02pm -
Kidnapping is always fun, eh?November 29th, 2010 at 02:47am
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"Fine," she agrees. The waiter comes back with our check. Lorraine leans over to read his name tag. "Thanks... Jscott?" It comes out sounding like juh-scott.
"Jay-scott, he corrects. "But spelled J-S-C-O-T-T."
"Why is there a random J in your name?"
"Why is there a random scott in my name?"
Lorraine doesn't have an answer, so she gets out her money for the check. She gets up to leave. "Thanks, Jay-scott."
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^^EPICNESS
HAHAHA I KNOW HIM. Juh-Scott. rotflmfaoatlabijsdf. (Rolling on the floor laughing my fabulous ass off and then laughing again because it's just so damn funny.) Oh yeah. That just happened. But seriously, I am writing this before I even finished the chapter sooo buh-bai for now and then I will write a real essay (or two).