Lights - Comments

Alright, I absolutely LOVE this story. Like, for real. I fucking love it. =]

I think I'm getting more on time now - ha, ha. This was a beautiful chapter, everything flowed so well, even when you abruptly put in another scene and added Ryan's many worrying thoughts it all flowed as slow and magnificent as a river.

I didn't have any problems following the story and there were so many adorable moments in chapter eleven. One of many: It was surprisingly close to becoming routine, but that didn't stop the nervous pang in Ryan's chest from forcing himself to sit up and slide out of bed the instant the agonised yell awoke him. Something about that had brought a pang to my heart too, the care that Ryan has equals to something of a father, but not quite a lover yet it has that magnificent edge that it could twist either way (no pun intended).

Brendon just hid his glistening eyes and tried to keep his shoulders from shaking as hard as they tried to. I felt connected in a sense that he was a child trying to hide his tears away from the world, because he was always that happy child with a grin wide on his face and the sight of a tear would just puzzle everyone that knew him.

It was another two-second alteration in his life that he barely noticed at first, and didn't see the ramifications that would occur as a result. In a way, this two second change just reinforced the first one. Ryan's perplexity and nature adds to the way you worded this statement, if you had written it any other way it would not have made much sense and it would not fit as much, so this was brilliantly executed of his thoughts and natural instints that come afterwards.

The tenderness of the last part, mix of confusion, was brilliantly executed and a not-so-secret cliffhanger leaves the perfect amount of contempt but with a ping of the heart for any reader, but the thing I want to know more of is Brendon's past. However, I think I'm starting to understand the secrecy though. If Brendon does decide to tell Ryan it should be done in moderation, I think you should tell only part of it and place the rest of them as clues for Ryan and the reader to notice.

Nevertheless, I think this starting to become a wonderful piece and I can see why you entered NaNoWriMo, with your writing style it leaves anyone ready to read more with anticipation laced within their bones. I was ready to jump out of the chair, groaning that there was no more. That would be a site to see for my family - ha, ha.

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Oh they kissed! How cute! I don't know what's gonna happen now though!
This is absolutely one of my favorite stories! I get SO excited everytime it updates!

I'm really glad that Brendon is okay even if he is pretty hurt. Poor Brendon... Poor Ryan... I feel really bad for both of them. I miss the happy times.... :(
But this story is still amazing and one of my absolute favorites to read. :)

I was shaking at the beginning of this chapter!!! Sooooo scared!!! What's going on with poor Brendon?????? he's all black and blue and yellow; ow!!! don't worry Ryan I understand!!! update soon!!!

Okay, please, please, PLEASE, update this asap. I'm dying. This is one of my favorites here just so you know. :)

I LOVE this story! I LOVE IT!
It is incredibly hilarious and incredibly well written.
Amazing job.
I cannot wait until more!
Please update! Please!

This is a great story, and it's amazingly well written! Great job!!!
Brendon just cracks me up, he's aboslutely hilarious; but his mysterious past gives him soo much more as a character, I love it. Ryan just makes me want to smile :).
and they're right, you SHOULD have more comments on this story.
Where's Brendon?????? I hope everything is okay!!!

Fortune's Fool:

You should have wayyyyy more comments. This is amazing <33

I totally agree with this.
You're not getting enough comments amount this well written story.
Plus, I love the air of mystery Brendon has. That's pretty much the reason I am still hooked on this story - I was you're first commenter - because you're not throwing them at each other so soon.

You should have wayyyyy more comments. This is amazing <33

This story has been going so well, it is amazing to see them both with jobs now! I'm worried about Brendon though, if this friendship between them is going to work they have to be able to tell each other anything that is wrong.

“Can't have some nightmare being mean to my Brendon. So, we'll catch it with a net and lock it away where it'll never get out. Does that sound like a plan to you?” That sounds downright adorable and as if someone is rambling just to make someone smile. I love it!

If Ryan allowed me to stay in that house with me, I would be working the next day trying to earn my share of the apartment as well. However, these two seem the perfect roomies and they will forever be happy and in content with each other.

That have a very admirable description of someone his or her age, and you are still doing well with what you have got going! Keep it up! My warning about my lateness has come into affect since my last post.

i really enjoy this. ;)
keep going!

Okay if you hadn't gathered this already, your story is phenomenal.
It's so innocent and light-hearted, and they're so oblivious.

You're a fantastic writer. Keep up the good work (: x

DING DING DING FRIES ARE DONE.

...silly bobbie, brent is the one that works at mcdonalds!

They are so freaking adorable, really. :))
I love them already
Ryan's kind of making me wish I was some homeless bum that he would run into. :))
Does something happen between Bren and Spen? : >
Does Ryan get jealous?
Will my questions ever get answered?
Find out in the next chapter offfffff LIGHTS XD
Sorry, I always wanted to do that. :))
But srsly, will they get answered soon? : >

And Like I said in my previous comment, this chapter was worth the wait : >

I can't believe you don't have a billion comments by now.
This has got to be THE most substantial Ryden I have ever read, and I do hope that you get to update more often because I really do love it wholly. I mean, it's not one of those typical Ryden's where the focal point is them getting together or having sex or some other, but it actually starts off and it describes how exactly they develop their friendship. And, with your style of writing, you'd be able to efficiently describe how their feelings for one another would start up and how it would affect them individually.

I also love how you characterized each character in the way how you think they would react given certain situations - it makes the story that much more realistic. It really does seem like this is exactly how they would interact with one another: the underlying playful tone in their sarcastic remarks.

I really want to find out what kind of background you've come up with for the characters, like, why Brendon had no home in the first place, etc. It just makes it that much more exciting to read the next chapter, and of course, you never disappoint. :) You write - or wrote, actually XD - each chapter so that the wait would be so worth it, whether you meant to or not.

It really is just that well written.

I hope you get to update soon! :)

No! Noooo! I'm supposed to be focusing on my writing but... But this looks so good I wanna read it! Damn you, child with good and original Ryden ideas...

I really love this story.
"Frog-Hawk"
hehe that made me giggle.

I'm one of your few, or many, subscribers, I've been trying to spare some time to write a message about this story but school has began to pick up the pace, I've barely just been able to keep up with all my subscription. Thank God for weekends! (:

Anyways, this is such a lovely, quaint story and when I imagine these people talk it sounds posh but with a slight tone of childish antics behind it, just the right amount for someone of the early twenties. That is something I have not found much of - someone who can right a particular age and pull it off well. Kudos to you.

I do not know much about them except what my friends have told me, and that is that they were in a band and now they have gone their separate ways or something. However, I don't know much of how you're writing this, pre-breakup or not, but if it is a story that doesn't involve the band then I wish you good luck, writing stories about people that are in bands can be hard especially if they are out of their element.

Overall, I do enjoy reading this story; I will still be late with my comments but you will get one every few chapters or so. Keep up the great work! (:

Now, dance or we'll tell everyone here than you're going to invade earth!

That was a great line. I let out a chuckle at the way it was so innocent but could be taken serious depending on the facial expression. This is a really great story.

Ryan puffed out his chest in a superman moment, before also dropping his bags to the ground with a heavenly sigh.

Heh heh heh....