Goodbye to Romance - Comments

Did he really say he loved her?!?!?! :D

Wooooowww this was the best update ever omggggggggg your amazinggggggg holyyy shit wow :O update soooonn❤️❤️

Omfg okay I fucking loved this fo'real. FO'REAL KAYBABY. FO'REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAL!
Fave line? More like word. "Gross." Don't know why but it was my favorite and to be quite honest, after certain parts I put "Gross" right after it and it made it fucking hilarious and I'm not sorry hahaha
Another one that had me internally screaming was "I was 95% asleep and hardly lucid when I heard the quiet whisper of “I love you” slip." EXCUSE ME OMFG!!!!! Was that Matty that said it? Please tell me it was. I will scream even more. I will be so happy hahahah

From the story comment swap here I read the first couple of chapters and I really like what you've got so far. Your style of writing is easy to read, good use of grammar, your descriptions easy to follow but not overly descriptive. You've got a good balance I think.

I do think you use 'and' quite a lot, which is fine obviously, but it may help the flow of your story a lot better if you used commas instead now and then, like instead of 'I felt the man’s hot breath against my neck again and felt him tuck me in closer to his body.' try 'I felt the man’s hot breath against my neck again, feeling him tuck me in closer to his body.' A tiny change like that makes a lot of difference I think. Obviously this up to you it's fine either way, just something I thought I'd mention.

I don't really see many stories involving slavery, and so I think yours is quite unique and well thought out. Although, as there's a rape scene right at the start, which was done quite well, maybe add a trigger warning into your summary as it may be a little distressing for other readers who stumble onto it. All in all you're a very good writer and I might just check the rest of it out, even though I'm not particularly a fan of the band.

I have read this entire story so far in 1 night. You can say that I love it! Lol

I noticed your tense change, but I figured it was for the purposes of the chapter since it mainly talked about what Matt was doing anyway. I do that all the time, though, return to a story I haven't worked on in a while, write for a bit, and then realize that I'm writing in the wrong tense. :) It happens to everyone I bet.

Anyway, I'm glad to see that this story is back! I've reread it countless times while waiting for you to continue writing it, so it makes me very happy to see you continuing it.

So addicted to this story!! Awesome writing :)

Oh my god I love this story! I was hooked from the first chapter and couldn't stop reading! Please update soon!

Love love loved it. Reading this made me feel a bit better since the day was shit. Can't for more.

It was an awesome update!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Please update again soon?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
:D

Love the story!!

loved the new chapter! and can't wait for the next one! is Kayden ever gonna see her family again??

I have missed this story so much!
I don't even come onto mibba much anymore....but as soon as I saw that this was updated I got so excited xD

Hopefully more soon, yeah? (:
<3

OH MY GOSH! YESH! DIS STORY! YEEEEEESSS SIRRR.....sorry, for a moment there, I went ghetto.

You commented on my story reccomending this and it's awesome! Thank you for telling me! Please update! I loved this, especially Matt's temper tantrums/mood swings. So good.

So i just started reading this and i cant stop. So far, chapter 24 (penance) is my favorite. Haha

I have waites for a update for sooo longg thank you for updating!! Please update more often <3

So excited about this update! It was amazing! Hope to see another update soon!! :)

I'm still reading

I am still reading!!!!!!