Goodbye to Romance - Comments, page 3

brady07 (100)

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I love this story!! Please keep it going. Absolutely fantastic :)

January 3rd, 2014 at 06:19am

iseepurplepeople (100)

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Has been forrrrevverr, but I do love this story! Super glad you updated. It was nice to see more into how Matt feels about her.

Update soon!

January 3rd, 2014 at 05:31am

Rath (100)

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Awww yay! I have been waiting for this story to be updated! :D
I loved the update!!!
It was amazing!
:D
Please update again soon?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
:D

January 3rd, 2014 at 03:31am

GoodLife (100)

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i practically cried when i saw that you posted! thank you soo much! loved the new chapter and i love you! pleeeease keep updating!!!

January 3rd, 2014 at 02:25am

xSweet.Afterlifex (100)

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OMFG I loved this. I kinda just blinked when i saw the notification in my e-mail. This chapter was great! I'm really excited to see what happens next!

January 3rd, 2014 at 12:42am

xshadowsxwillxfallx (100)

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DAMMIT KORIE! Why my guy? Rude lmao. I was surprised to see this updated! Lovely as ever though!

January 2nd, 2014 at 11:37pm

Laura13 (100)

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Just foun this story and I love it! Please update!!!!

November 24th, 2013 at 02:50pm

kalisweetblood (100)

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Updaaaaate. :(

November 20th, 2013 at 02:42am

Rath (100)

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Oh my God!
I love this story!
You have to update very soon!
Please?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
:D
*subscribes*

June 26th, 2013 at 06:58am

xBurningRainbowsx (100)

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Pleaaaase update! Pleaseeee? Im literally begging you !

April 19th, 2013 at 02:18am

makethekidsbelieve (100)

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NO THIS IS NOT THE TIME TO NOT UPDATE THIS GOSH I WAS READING THIS THINKING IT HAD 1000000000000000 CHAPTERS SO I WOULD BE GOOD AND NOT WANT MORE EVEN THOUGH I WAS WRONG IDK JUST FIX IT FIX IT NOW

February 26th, 2013 at 08:28pm

makethekidsbelieve (100)

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more more more

February 26th, 2013 at 08:01pm

Fadingdreams (100)

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update!!!

February 12th, 2013 at 08:21am

sunshinensarcasm (100)

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can you say, UPDATE?!

like, NOW!!!

January 22nd, 2013 at 08:22pm

Linzee_Gee (100)

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Update!!!!

December 27th, 2012 at 10:54am

Quoth Raven (100)

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I'm still hanging on for this update PLEASE uPDATE!

December 24th, 2012 at 03:36am

beauty051 (100)

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UPDATEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!

November 3rd, 2012 at 09:44pm

kid with a lawnmower (100)

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please update soon!

October 10th, 2012 at 03:05pm

girlmeetsworld1 (105)

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Thank you for starting again :) I love!!!!

October 7th, 2012 at 04:35am

Zorua (100)

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Hey, I'm here to comment again! :)

My first impression of the summary and layout was actually good. Though I'm not a big fan of fanfiction or rape stories, the subject drew me in. :)

I don't really have a lot of constructive criticism to offer besides nit-picky things. A lot of times the flow gets choppy, and that's because there are a lot of single-sentence paragraphs. I'd suggest only singling out a sentence if it's absolutely necessary for humor or for intensity. There are also some things that seem unrealistic to me during the story, but it's minor and not to really be worried about.

All in all, you have very good writing, there's not any blatant typos, and the plot moves along nicely. Whenever something slows down, you pick it up right away with some action. Props to you! I hope you continue to enter contests! :)

September 29th, 2012 at 02:09am