This entire fucking paragraph is my favorite so far: "I woke up when my tired sobs began wracking my small chest and I could fucking feel the rapist’s wandering fingers trail over my bare skin. I felt everything, I remembered every moment and every motion the two men had made the night before, right up to the burning in my thighs. The darkness almost paralyzed me, scaring me to the point of shaking again, and the darkness brought back those terrible, never-ending memories."
You got the surviving-yet-traumatized rape victim thing down perfectly, trust me. I like how realistic you're making her. She seems desperate and scared but at the same time you know she wants to survive. That's why she says she doesn't want to cry. I love it.
I can't wait for the next update. Want me to comment again so you can get to 75? I really will if you want me to, I'll do it. I'll find more to say =)
At that moment, the sex slave owner was my savior.
That was really sweet because in a sense he does give her a sense of security in the end. I didn't know she was raped by both guys I thought it was one, I guess i must have missed something or it could have just been a dream. Anyways she's lucky Matt isn't a jerk (well for now at least) or he could have done much worse to her, not giving a damn about what she wanted.
“Hush,” he ordered calmly and picked up the pile of pajamas he’d left for me earlier. “I’m going to put you in pajamas and then we’ll go to my office. Quit crying,” he chided, “before you puke all over everything.”
That was so sweet, but at the same time a little disturbing, only because I'm not a big fan of the word puke for some odd reason. I think that I am slowly becoming addicted to this story. The way that you have it written, and the way that you made Matt all badass, but then a sweetheart when it came to her crying. Very, very nice. :) I really want you to update, because that would make me so happy.
o my gosh I loved it! When he was dressing her all I could think was, she isn't wearing underware... weird... lol. anyways. your one of like 2 stories that i read that actually updates regularly and that makes me smile. XD update soon
I didn’t wake up when he climbed two more spiral staircases or when he fumbled with a key to unlock the room he was taking me. I didn’t wake up when he gently set me down on the large bed and I didn’t wake up when he crawled in next to me and pulled my sleeping body against his.
I love this part of the story. ^_^
Can't wait to see more from this amazing story. :)
This story is quite different from all of the other genres I've read out there. It's dark, which I like, and it really knows how to trigger my emotions. I'm loving the fact that you're showing the softer side of Matt. :)
"I knew I should’ve been absolutely terrified of this man, who could do whatever he liked to me right then, but at that moment, I was absolutely terrified of the darkness and the things the darkness contained.
At that moment, the sex slave owner was my savior."
Quit crying,” he chided, “before you puke all over everything.” lmao i kno it was suppose to be sad but that was funny as hell lmao scary movie two with the puke scene XD
I'm surprised how gentle Shadows was with her! I kinda laughed at the part how he said that she couldn't handle him. I hope you get those comments! I love this story so far! Keep it coming!!!
Okay, I see how everyone is all 'Yay! Mattie's the saviour! He's not raping her! He's such a sweetie!" EH, WRONG. I see past that. He just feels shit bad she's in fucking tears, worried about her her life. Watch, he's going to turn into the biggest douche nozzle soon. I know it. Perks of knowing you, Korie. LOL But still, loved it endlessly! Now I have to wait until you hit 75 comments. BLAH. Whatever. I can make it. Damn, sounded like some random kidnapped person in a story. lol Looooved and update soon!