She's so Bright - Comments

I really like this, and I can relate sooo hard to Ellarie that it almost hurts, haha. Can't wait to read more. :)

Give me chapters I haven't read yet, I'm still curious to know if she will give John a chance. Plus, I think her heartbreaker ex will come back to hunt her.

Give me chapters I haven't read yet, I'm still curious to know if she will give John a chance. Plus, I think her heartbreaker ex will come back to hunt her.

aww well I think you're really talented at writing I hope you get inspiration to write more soon!! :)

@ earthtosammie
thank you! I've been updating quite frequently because I have 9 chapters pre-written. I posted those 9 chapters over a 3 year period, and just recently I took them down and edited them and am now in the process of re-posting them. but, as far as brand new chapters, I haven't written one in maybe a month, although I fully intend to. I'm just lazy :p

I love this story!! I was wondering how often you update?

I love this story!! I was wondering how often you update?

Ugh I wanna marry Garrett Nickelsen. John's being a supah creep huh? I feel like that's just gonna get funnier and funnier as the story goes on.

@ write4fun
she's living with her cousin's family, her aunt and uncle and cousins, because her mother was the only family she lived with, she has no brothers or sisters, and she doesn't know who her dad is, her mother wouldn't tell her. like I said, she's 19, so she doesn't technically need a guardian, but she chose to live with the Nickelsen's because she isn't yet ready to live on her own due to social phobia, no college education, and no job. I hope that makes sense.

I think her being his cousin makes more sense, also the editing is good because it means you'll be updating more often yeeey

ellarie's condition kinda sound like me

i like ellarie as garrett's sister better, because y would ellarie live with her cousin's family?! is it because she don't have a supportive family herself?!

glad this is back and new! update soon thanks!

glad this is back and new! update soon thanks!

@ ethereally
I completely understand what you're saying about the writing from 3-5 years ago, this is actually the first time I've been active on mibba in a while, and looking back on my writing from even from more than a year ago is extremely cringe worthy.
But I'm glad to hear you're not using the pitting women against each other and the 'love cures all' tropes or romanticizing mental illness, and I'm sorry I was a little aggressive in my comment about them. They're just extremely annoying and problematic tropes that I can't stand honestly I just get really mad about them, and none of that is directed at you.
I'm sorry you've had to deal with these types of mental illnesses, as well. They truly are a pain in the ass. I understand that a lot of the problems with the story are due to when they were written and all of them are fixable and everything, and I'm excited to see how the rewriting goes. And you can ask me any questions you have about social anxiety, it's no problem for me! I can't speak for everyone with social anxiety, but I can definitely speak about my own experiences with it.

@ moonrise kingdom.
I’ll start by saying I’ve dealt with depression for a very, very long time and social anxiety as well. So, although how I’m writing Ellarie’s experiences and such may not be your experience with depression and social anxiety, doesn’t mean that it’s not accurate. I’m writing her very much based on what I’ve gone through myself. Saying that, I will admit, when I first started writing this, I didn’t deal with social anxiety, so the first few chapters, they’re totally off. I had no education on the disorder back then and I certainly didn’t know how it would be dealt with in real life. I was 15/16 (I’m 20 now) and wanted to write something that was dramatic and attention grabbing and cool. So, honestly, I had no fucking idea what I was doing.
Also, and this is what I want to put big emphasis on, I wrote the first 5 chapters, 3-5 years ago. So of course they’re not the greatest. They’re flawed as fuck. I just haven’t gotten around to fixing them. But, seeing as they’ve been viewed as problematic by someone, I will go back and fix them.

And the problematic language? I have 2 things to say about that. 1. Dialogue is allowed to be problematic. Human beings say problematic things. That’s normal. That’s natural. But that’s not to say I’m supporting it. Like, if I wrote a story about rape or murder or some other terrible thing, it’s not that I’m saying I support it. 2. I said it before, and I’ll say it again, these early chapters were written 3-5 years ago. In my world, that wasn’t problematic language back then. But I know now it is. It’s actually kind of funny though because I was reading a previous chapter the other day and I saw that I used the word “faggot” and I actually cringed. So, if it’s any consolation, I agree that it’s not a word that should be used

I’m sorry that you felt offended by me saying Ellarie isn’t normal. But. She isn’t. The definition of normal is “conforming to a standard; usual, typical, or expected”. Ellarie is not standard, usual, typical, or expected. Therefore when I said she isn’t normal, it is true. And who ever said it was a bad thing to not be normal? I know that personally, I would never be offended if someone said I wasn’t normal because of my depression and social anxiety. It isn’t the norm. It’s different. But again, I’m sorry you were offended by it.

The side characters don’t seem like much now, because they’re not. I haven’t fully developed Ellarie, trust me she’s more than some sad, anxiety-ridden girl. And Molly has only been in two chapters, so there’s not much to be known about her yet. They will never be pitted against each other. That’s horribly cliché and I won’t let that happen. And speaking of horribly cliché things, there will be no “love cures everything” trope. Like I’ve said, I’ve dealt with severe depression and mild anxiety, and I have a super supportive boyfriend and I’ve been with him for 2 years, but he hasn’t fixed me. That’s up to me to fix myself. Because mental illnesses don’t just go away because someone falls in love with you. John wants to fix Ellarie but that doesn’t mean that he will.

I’m so not trying to romanticize mental illnesses. They fucking suck and they’re a nightmare to deal with. Maybe when I was younger, I was trying to, because I had no idea that doing that was problematic. But I know now that it is and I’m not trying to romanticize anything. I'm just trying to write a story about on overly optimistic boy who falls in love with a girl with social anxiety and all the hardships and drama that ensues.

Most importantly, I am very sorry to hear that you’ve had to deal with this stuff personally. Although our experiences have obviously been different, I can still relate to some degree, and my heart really goes out to you. I hope you’re doing better now. Honestly.

At first I was a little peeved when I read your comment, but I understand you only had good intentions behind it. When it comes down to it, I am grateful. I said in my last author’s note to call me out on my shit and you did just that. Or course it’s hard to be critiqued but it is needed. I definitely needed it. Because now I can go and improve my story. And who wouldn’t want their story to be better it is now? So, thank you. Honestly. No hard feelings at all.

I’ll probably spend the rest of the week reconstructing this story. Because, well, we both know it needs it.

Also, just wondering, if I have any questions about social anxiety, is it okay if I ask you? Like, if you don’t want to be bothered, just let me know.

ellarie's outfit looks kinda sexy 4 a person wit social problems