Of Thieves And Do Gooders - Comments

Great story! I read it all in one sitting.

Same italics problem on 32 and 34, but the good news is I finished rereading and that's everything!!!

Also Hayden is randomly temporarily renamed Aiden for a minute in chapter 14.....
Later in 14 it says:
“That was about Derek being a colossal asshole for the sake of nothing better than keeping up his reputation as an asshole,”
Which doesn't really sound like it makes sense.
23 also has the italicization problem.

Sorry for spamming corrections.

in chapter 13 you italicized something but never un-italicized it and so the second half of the chapter is all italic-ey

I missed updates so much so I'm rereading the entire series.
I just wanted to *obnoxiously* alert you that in chapter 5 you wrote
"School for thieves? More like a school for hot guys who were to tall for their own good."

too tall***

I love this story its pretty amazing!!!!! :)

I was very confused about Lawrence as well, and was going to point it out except... I forgot. Brilliant excuse, I know. :P
Have I already mentioned that I love this story? And how excited I am for the new one? And that I started freaking out when I saw that you updated for the first time in three months? But hey, it was three whole chapters, so I guess it's all good. ;)

I just read this and it took me like a day to read it all :) couldnt tear my eyes away :P
although i did get confused when you said haydens dad was called lawrence? i thought it was jack :s oh well :P

wowo. the ending was simple, but it seemed to fit with the tone of the whole story. Very good. Since it isn't much, i am definitely looking forward to the sequel, soon!!!!

Please update soon! I'm dying here!

Uh, If you don't update soon there WILL be blood shed. Just saying :)

helllll yeah. :D moved from quizilla and updates? awesomeness

Just about squealed when I saw the update ^^

Loved it, I almost starting laughing at the part where Amber walked in, but I couldn't and had to force them back because then my parents would've walked in and asked what I was laughing about...uhmmmmm...yeah. Awkward situations are best avoided. XD

Love itlovelovelovelovelove it! Can't wait 'til next time ^^

Ever since you made the Hayden/Edward comparison I can't stop thinking of Damion as Jacob... I hate Jacob... But I don't want to hate Damion... But I do... 'cause he's a Jacob... >_< Anyways! I just found this story yesterday... already read all the chapters and love it, just a few quick corrections and comment:
In chapter 16, you call vicodin a 'proscription drug'. Shouldn't it be 'prescription'?
In chapter 21, after the bold 'Six Hours Later' the paragraph was a little confusing where it was mentioning Leon: "On the lucky side, however, I found myself near Leon and his date a lot of the time, even if I couldn't find Leon or Hayden. Leon was the only one who hadn't annoyed me earlier on in the day so it was a little annoying." Was one of the Leons supposed to be Damion?
In chapter 22 when she's talking in front of her brother's grave: "I never should have 'diluted' myself into believing I belonged somewhere again..." Should it be 'deluded'? also in Chapter 26: "You guessed right and I stopped 'diluting' myself into thinking that I--"
The other errors were just random mistypes that are easily passed over. Really really like this story and hope you update soon! A sign of a good story for me is if it's possible to picture the world the characters are in, and you do an amazing job at describing it! ^__^

Still going amazingly. I'm kind of sad that she hurt Damion, but I still think she should find a way to get with Hayden XDDD

Anyway, loving it, and can't wait for more!
i'm glad you were convinced to split it up some.

aww! this is a fantastic story!

Holycrapholycrapholycrap you updated after like, a year! AHHHHHHHHH!!!
Ok, now that I got over my momentary blabberingness, on to my actual comments.
I kind of feel bad for Damion, even though he kind of annoys me. Yes, I wish the chapter was longer, if only because I'm so goddamn impatient. But what the hell, you updated, I'm happy now. I think you just made my otherwise pretty shitty day. :)

Chapter 35 was a really good chapter, I would be so uncomfortable talking to Damon if I was in Raven's place. And what did you mean that you meant this to be the last chapter or was it just the number of chapters you wanted?

i cant wait for the next chapter!

One word - update or I will track you down and eat pancakes in your face. I will do it!