Mess of Fading Lines - Comments

mmm, john can pretend to be my boyfriend any day :)

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My mind was running around in circles about him, whether or not to trust him or like him. She knew she'd like him regardless though.

This part here confused me when you fell out of first person. Not sure if you meant to do that or not, but I figure I'd let you know. :]
There were a few spelling mistakes riddled about as well, but didn't affect the story at all. Its still amazing and way too fun to read :D

Also; this was one of the greatest lines ever. It made my night.

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"Feed me," I said jutting out my bottom lip and making my eyes wide with the best puppy face I could conjure.

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My mind was running around in circles about him, whether or not to trust him or like him. She knew she'd like him regardless though.

This part here confused me when you fell out of first person. Not sure if you meant to do that or not, but I figure I'd let you know. :]
There were a few spelling mistakes riddled about as well, but didn't affect the story at all. Its still amazing and way too fun to read :D

Also; this was one of the greatest lines ever. It made my night.

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"Feed me," I said jutting out my bottom lip and making my eyes wide with the best puppy face I could conjure.

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AWE! That was cute. John is adorable. They need to be together! Goodness, Lillian, she's a bitch. Haha. Loved the update. Can't wait till the next one. :)

You are a genius for writing this.
Update soon, please?

love love love this story!!!

I love this story!
It's just so hilarious & well written & exciting. =)
Can't wait to see what will happen!

Lucy's mom is a bitch, and John is probably going to take this whole faking dating thing and run when Lillians around cant wait for more ^^

So cute haha Holden is hilarious ^^

Awe, super cute, even though he was being a doucheee ahaha :D Update!

I love this. i love how hilarious this is. Omg.

Awe. I'm surprised he didn't take advantage of the fake dating thing! Lol.
I'm sort've glad he was sweet, although I did miss him being the jerk! Hahaa.
Zoolander is fucking amazing! I need to watch that soon! (:
I'm thinking Holden may be liking John more and more! WOOHOO! Lol.
I can't wait for more, love! (:

haha, i liked that one. they are really cute when they get along. and i love finding nemo :)

Haha, that last bit cracked me up!
I liked how laid back this chapter seemed :)

I Love this (;
update ♥

John's going to abuse this whole fake dating thing isn't he?
The sneaky bastard haha I love it already
and geez is Lucy's mom a bitch.
can't wait to see where he takes her :)

Oh goodness, Lillan's a bitch! I don't like her. Awe man, John and Holden should just go out for real already! Can't wait till the next update. :)

Oh, sheet! I see loads of drama coming for Holden for that stunt!
Seriously, though, Lucy's mom is a fucking bitch for saying those
Things about Holden. Like, seriously.
I could see John taking this fake dating thing to his advantage.
Like kissing Holden when they're around Lillian, because, ya know,
Couples kiss! Bahahaa. I can't wait for more, love! (:

i like it :)

oh my, i'm in love.
i wonder whats gonna happen at casa de o'callaghan?
can't wait for the next update!