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  • brianna7x

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    IT'S OVER. :o
    And again, I KNOW i'm late on commenting. I feel like a jerk.
    But wow, seriously loved that ending. I really didn't expect it
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    September 24th, 2010 at 09:10am
  • jade_

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    AHHHHHHHHH
    Tori, I can't believe this is over :( hahah
    But it was the sweetest story. You had an amazing original story line and an exceptional talent at all of your characterisation, which really means that it was another one of your brilliant master pieces :)
    Although I missed reading about dear Jack, you did an excellent job with Zachary in this one, and I can honestly say this is the only Zack story I have read from start to finish :):) soo double yays are in order, and you should feel incredibly proud :):)
    Your chapters were filled with extremely realistic and everyday common feelings and emotions, and it was the simple things that really made this story so easy to connect with, it was perfect.
    I loved it very much, and although I am going to miss this now it is finished, I can't wait for you to get started on Disconnected :)

    Thank you for always giving me shout outs and being such an amazing writer,
    I'll be reading your stuff until the end! haha
    <3 love jadeeee,
    xo
    September 7th, 2010 at 01:48pm
  • Ultraviolet Light

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    awwww so sad its over!!
    i loved this so much!!!
    September 6th, 2010 at 11:21pm
  • jade_

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    This was incredibly cute/sweet, as per usual :)
    I'm a mix of excited/incredibly sad about the next update being the last,
    but I guess this will just be another finished and successful story to add to your already amazing list :)
    I found it cute how they both apologised, it kind of shows the strength in their relationship.

    I'm really sorry to hear about your doggy though :( But I'm sure you'll be okay, just think about all the happy memories you had together :)
    Hope you're alright,x
    August 27th, 2010 at 09:47am
  • brianna7x

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    Okay, i've done it again. I feel horrible for just now catching up again : [
    Anyway, LAST CHAPTER?! Well that's a bummer. But good at the same time!
    Because then you can focus on your new story!

    Sorry about your dog :'[ i've had to do that before. It's definitely not easy.
    But you'll be fine <3
    August 24th, 2010 at 07:16am
  • TrInIgUrL

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    :'( I know about the putting your dog down thing.
    Great chapter. (sob) The story's almost over. But I'm heading to check out the Jack story in a moment!!!!!
    August 23rd, 2010 at 08:22pm
  • Akayytoremember

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    AHHHH!
    anticipitation!
    August 23rd, 2010 at 08:53am
  • Ultraviolet Light

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    awww im glad theyre all good now!
    August 23rd, 2010 at 02:18am
  • Kelseylynnf

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    I'm so sorry about your dog. :(
    I loved this chapter though!
    It was weird that Zack and Grayson argued because it seemed they never did until now. I'm happy they got it worked out though and understand where they are each coming from now :)
    I'm sad that there is only one chapter left, but i am so excited for your Jack story!!!!! :)
    <3 Kelsey
    August 23rd, 2010 at 02:02am
  • heyJAYhey

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    I love this story so much! I was so upset at the beginning -- things weren't looking very good at all. But it certainly turned around towards the end.

    I'm so sorry to hear about your dog D:
    August 23rd, 2010 at 01:31am
  • jade_

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    Aww, I don't know whether I should be disappointed with Zack or understanding...
    That seriously sucks for Grayson, she was looking forward to that and it meant a lot to her that he was going to come, so I understand why she's upset, but it's not exactly like Zack planned to have the instores and stuff, and its not as though he can't go to them either, he has responsibilities with the band as well.
    I guess that's just going to be like a strain in their relationship if they can't work around it, which is sad :( But I'm sure everything will work out alright, it's just a bit of a bad thing to drop on Grayson after the whole 'i haven't seen you in several weeks and I've been looking forward to seeing you again every single day.' thing.

    On another sad note, only a few chapters are left :( but I'm most definitely looking forward to them :)
    Update soon :):)

    ps; Annabelle, Jack and Alex... cuteness hahaha
    August 21st, 2010 at 02:59am
  • Kelseylynnf

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    Yay for an update!!!
    I definitley didn't expect Zack to say that he couldn't come.
    I understand why Grayson would be upset but it's not like he's saying he can't go on purpose.
    I hope she understands in time because it seemed like she was mad at him when he told her....
    And i was reading that part I was thinking maybe he's just saying that and going to surprise her or something lol. can't wait to find out!
    Annabelle is the cutest when she's around Jack and Alex. They are so good to her :)
    <3 Kelsey
    August 21st, 2010 at 12:24am
  • TrInIgUrL

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    Awwwwww. I don't want this story to end!!!!!!!
    If it wasn't for the fact that it was realy good, I'd digitally smack you!!!!!
    And i agree with heyJAYhey, he's gonna show up in new york and surprise them right. Like, he'll take the flight right after theirs or something????
    UPDATE (and sorry about your computer. May it rest in peace)
    August 20th, 2010 at 09:18pm
  • heyJAYhey

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    noooo! this has gotta be a trick, right? like, zack's gonna show up at new york and be like "jk, it was all for the lawlz, i <3 you." right? RIGHT??
    August 20th, 2010 at 03:30pm
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    awesome story i really like it!
    i'm sad to see it end so soon!
    August 20th, 2010 at 05:38am
  • Akayytoremember

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    I'm so sad to see this coming to an end, and it's sad that Zack can't go to NY, but I'm thinking and hoping it's all part of a masterplan? or I could be way off base lol
    August 20th, 2010 at 03:52am
  • DontGet_It_InMyEye

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    ohmygod!!!!nooo!!!):
    August 20th, 2010 at 03:31am
  • nessajc

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    Jebus woman. A freaking roller coaster! But all is well everything can't always be perfect.

    Update soon.
    August 20th, 2010 at 03:01am
  • Ultraviolet Light

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    aww yay update!!
    awww i dont want her to be mad/sad with zack!
    August 20th, 2010 at 02:48am
  • brianna7x

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    I feel extremely bad that I didn't comment on the last chapter :[
    I just now got caught up on updates.

    Anyway, I love how cute Alex and Jack are with Annabelle. She gets so excited :D
    And Zack is just a sweetheart.
    :D
    August 11th, 2010 at 08:05am